Your Character in my story.

OOC: Okay Damax!
CHAPTER 17
Kyra growled at Raxtion. "You little.." she swung her sword at Raxtions face. It hit and left a deep cut. Blood gushed everywhere, but Raxtion didn't seem to notice. "You demon summoner!" Raxtion let loose a flurry of ice spells that hit Kyra everywhere. "Argghh...oh crap!!" Kyra had noticed that she was frozen in place. She couldn't move. Raxtion smirked. "Now to end this." Raxtion slashed at Kyra's face until she couldn't fight anymore. "Laides and gentleman, we will now remove the bricks to see who has won the tornement!" The announcer cried. The bricks were removed, and the crowd looked upon the fighters. "Alright folks, the winners are as follows:
First place-Raxtion!
Second place-Rako
Third place- Ranax
Fourth place-Kyra
Come back next year!" The crowd cheered. Ranax went home thinking 'I don't need anymore training. Tommarrow, I'm going to get my reward.'

 

WOOT! ........

 

just keeps getting better. you should become a writer or something

 

Wow these just keep getting better and better. Keep it up! But, please don't beat up Ranax...too much.
How I feel about the story. :woohoo: :roll: :speechless-smiley-0 :woohoo:

 

Chapter 18
Ranax woke up the next morning. He gathered his sword and hopped on his gummi ship. He wanted backup in case the Organazation went beserk on him. He flew to Hollow Bastion,noticeing that two gummi ships were tailing him. He kept them in eyesight and landed right next to the ice cream vendor. The gummi ships parked right next to his, and the owners got out. It was Rage and Rako!! "Hey,what are you guys doing here?" he asked them. "I said I would help ya,and I'm not going back on my promise."Rako smirked. 'and blow up a few worlds while I'm at it' he thought. "Me too." Rage added. 'I might be able to melt down more keyblades if I travel with this guy!' he thought. "Okay then, you guys wait here. I have some stuff I have to take care of." Ranax told them. They nodded and he headed to the town. He entered a house that was near an old wizards. "Hey,Christy,ya home?" He yelled. "Ranax, is that you? I'll be down in a second!" Ranax smiled. His neice hadn't gotten rid of her energy yet.A 15-year-old girl with brown hair and green eyes wearing a black top,blue jeans,and black boots came down the stairs. That was Christy. "Hi Ranax! What brings you here?" she asked. "I need you to help me with a case I have." He whispered. "Christy?! Who is there?" a voice yelled. "Damax,come down here and meet my uncle!" She yelled. "Okay, okay,keep your shirt on." A guy with blond hair and dark blue eyes came down the stairs. He was wearing black non-puffy cargo pants with steel plated pockets,a black shirt,black gloves,a black jacket,and black boots. "So,your Ranax. Christy keeps talking about you." He shook hands with Ranax. "So,you are..?" Ranax asked. "I'm Damax. Christy invited me to live with her." Ranax nodded. "Well, Christy has to go with me, and I'm not sure when she's coming back. Maybe in a couple of days." He told Damax. "Christy,get your stuff." he told her.
>CRACK!<
Ranax looked up, and saw that Damax had a spear through his chest, and standing up at the top of the stairs, was a guy in a black cloack.

 

Holy $#!+ you're awsome! To bad for Damax though.

 

yea i feel kinda bad for him

 

CHAPTER 19
In front of Ranax's eyes, he saw Damax get transformed into a Heartless, and a Nobodie. He automaticly assumed that the pepole were of the Orgainazation. He looked at Christy and saw fear in her eyes. "You monsters! What are you going to do with him?" He cried. "We are going to put his Nobodie in the Organataztion." The guy, the heartless, and the Nobodie dissapered. Christy sank to the floor. Ranax went to her. "Christy, are you-" "I'm going to come with you and fight those *******s that hurt Damax!!" She got up, grabbed her suitcase, and ran to the door. "Come on!" Ranax followed.

 

wow... this is good... keep going, I want to see what happens next! :D

 

CHAPTER 20
OOC:Sorry that its late!!
Christy followed Ranax out the door, and all the way to where the gummi ships were. Rage and Rako were waitiing for them. "Is that a girl I see? How can she be any help?" Rage yelled. "Look,normaly I would ignore that comment, but I'm so pissed off right now that I won't. Make another comment like that, and I'll blow your head in." Christy responded. Rage recolied in fear, but Rako just smirked. "You know your own head missy. You'll be a good asset here." Christy just shrugged and hopped in Ranax's gummi ship. "C'mon guys, we have to go." Ranax hopped in the gummi ship and Rage hopped in his, but Rako let loose a fire spell that started a fire in a house. The others didn't notice. Rako smiled and hopped in his gummi ship. They all headed to the world that never was.
They didn't know that they were being tailed though. Behind them, Kyra and Raxtion followed them. "For Sora!!" Raxtion yelled, and let loose some rockets toward Ranax's ship. Kyra summoned up some Heartless gummi ships that attacked Rako and Rage. "Damnit!" Ranax yelled. "Christy, let loose the attack gummi's, and I'll try to keep hold of the ship." "Roger!" Christy took hold of the fireing missles, and Ranax turned around, along with Rage and Rako. Christy let loose some Ultima-g rockets that hit Kyra, But a heartless ship got close to her and fired it's rocket at close range. The ship rattled with the force, and it seemed like another rocket from it would damage it. Rako let loose a rocket that alblitorated it, and consentrated his firepower on Raxtion. Raxtion took the damage and blindly let loose more rockets. Rage let loose rockets at Kyra, who retaliated with more Heartless. "Ranax, we'll take care of things here! You fly away!" Rage's voice filled the moniter. Ranax nodded and sped away, leaving his friends to fight.

 

This...is...so...AWSOME!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work! :woohoo:

 

i can't wait to see what'll happen next

 

Another character, and 12 artifacts?

Would you mind to add this?

Name: Guardius
Age: oo (infinity)
Job: Protecting the 12 artifacts and holder of the key stone

12 Artifacts:
Artifacts: Capricorn, Aquarius, Pisces, Aries, Taurus, Gemini, Cancer, Leo, Virgo, Libra, Scorpio, and Sagittarius.
What they do: If all 12 artifacts are combined, they will become a door. And if the keystone unlocks the door, all artifacts will return to their original state. By doing so, the keyblade master will be revived... with the keyblade in his hands.
Protecter of the artifacts: Guardius (see my new character)
KeyBlade Master: Ya'll know right... I mean I you're in this forum you should have played Kingdom Hearts, right? Okay okay the keyblade master is............... Sora!

Conclusion: Sora could be revived (and his keyblade too)!!!

Thanks for noticin.

P.S.
I added this because I liked Sora... And I didn't want him to die...
P.S.S.
Please add a revive potion in the story for Leon...
P.S.S.S.
Why do the good characters die???? And even Sora died....
P.S.S.S.S.
:(

 

OOC:Okay I added them in.
CHAPTER 21
Ranax and Christy sped to The World That Never Was, and parked in front of the Organazation's castle. "Is this their stronghold? Looks like something a weakling would build." Chrisy spat. "Christy, pull out your gun. Even if this place looks weak, the enimes are tough." Christy pulled out her gun, Soul Stealer900. They started to walk up the path, when they heard a guy scream in the district behind him. Christy and Ranax ran back, trying to see who it was. They got past a corner, when they saw a boy, wearing silver pants, a silver shirt, and holding a silver sword. He was fighting Xigbar! "Give me back that stone! I protect them!!" The boy lunged toward Xigbar, but Xigbar doged. "Not anymore." he replied.
-CH-BLAN!
Xigbar had gotten shot in the head! Ranax and the boy looked back at Chrisy, who had her finger on the trigger. "Need some help?"

 

cool. if SoulStealer 900 was a real gun i would totally buy it. This just keeps getting better

 

OOC: Thanks!
CHAPTER 22
"Of course! my name is Guardius. Who are you?" He asked, letting his gaurd down for a second. "We'll tell you in a minute! First, behind you!" Ranax yelled. The undead Xigbar, had gotten behind Guardius. "Pest!" Cristy shouted, and shot a couple dozen more rounds at Xigbar. "Your the one that killed Damax, aren't you?!" "No. That was Xaldin." Xigbar replied. "We are still after your heartless, Ranax." Xigbar doged some of the bullets, but was hit on the ankles. "Look I don't have the Keyblade anymore!" He shouted, pulling out his sword. "C'mon, Guardius!" Guardius nodded, and walked forward. "Hand over the stone!" He pulled a downward thrust at Xigbar's head. Xigbar doged. "If you beat me." Christy let loose more bullets. "You know the guy that killed Damax!" "Damax isn't dead. He's joined our organazation. Ranax, we still want your nobodie, even if you don't have the keyblade." Xigbar doged the bullets, and let loose some of his own at Ranax and Guardius. They tried their best to deflect, while Chrisy snuck up behind Xigbar, and gave him a blow to the heart. "Yaaaaahhh!" He scremed in pain. He started fading, but a broken half of a heart flew to Chrisys gun, and went inside it. "What the-? What happened?!" She asked. "I dunno, but is there a stone there?" Guardius looked. There was no stone.

 

Wow this just keeps getting better! I can't wait to see what you have in mind for Christy's magic. :sly:

 

Wow!

That was good.... Anyways, keep on writing!

 

OOC: Thanks!
CHAPTER 23
"Huh? But, he took it!" Guardius looked around frantickly. "Maybe someone else did. Who did you see take it?" Ranax asked. "A guy in a black coat." "That could have been anyone." Christy snorted. "Ranax, where did that heart piece go?" She asked. Ranax pressed a white button on the gun, and a container holding the shattered heart appered on top of the gun. "Press the yellow button next to it to use it. It'll shoot five dark cannons at once." Two gummi ships landed next to the trio. Out hopped Rako and Rage. "Rako!, Rage! You made it in one peice!" Ranax yelled. "The girls just ran off after we really bombarded them. But then again, they were only girls." Rage replied. Christy then proceeded to bash him on the head. "Watch your mouth." Rako laughed. "You've got spunk." Guardius stood up. "My I come with you? I need to find those stones." "Sure. Everyone, this is Guardius." Everyone said hello. "How touching." said a voice. "WHO'S THERE!" Christy screamed. A black portal appeared, and out stepped a man with spiky red hair. "I'm Axel." He said before they could ask. "I have to kill you guys for two reasons. 1.Managment needs new helpers, and 2. Ranax killed Luxie."

 

Hel-lo???

I made Guardius have oo age cause HE CAN'T DIE.
And here in chapter 22 xigbar tells "we need guardius's nobody".