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I saw it.It's really good for your first time.

 

Thanks!! How've you been V and DS?

 

Awesome. :3

I'm pretty good. You? :)

 

I've been fine.Just trying to enjoy my vacation.All I do the whole day is write or be on here.So I've gotten kind of far in my new story.Although I need a title.

I gotta go.I need to go to bed and also because my brother wants to use the computer.I'll talk to you tomorrow.Night.

 

Morning all. How's everyone today?

 

Umm...hello? Anyone on?

 

Hey Shades.I'm on.

 

how are those stories of yours coming along?

 

Pretty good.But still thinking of a title for the main one I'm working on.

 

anything i could help with? What's the story outline?

 

Well its a lot like Bleahc but different.But it's not a fanfic.I've already typed up the first chapter.I'll post here for you guys to read it.

 

rawr! *hyper*

 

Not a fan fic? Might I suggest posting the story here, we can check it over and what not, then maybe we could help you narrow down a title?

Hey Demi

 

Here it is.


Hi, my names Kentaro Matsumoto. I’m a regular high school 15 year old. Nothing out of the ordinary about me. Like other 15 year old guys, I worry about girls, video games and other things but that’s not important. My father works at a clinic. He actually owns it ever since my grandfather passed away. I have two younger sisters and they’re twins. Amaya is the oldest. She was born 5 minutes before Miyuki. Like I said, Miyuki is the youngest. Our mother passed away when they were 7. They can’t remember much of her but I tell them stories about our mother every once in a while. A lot of the times it’s before they go to bed. Well anyways, lately I’ve been having these dreams. It’s quiet weird. It’s about some kid that had to go on a journey to save his world. I don’t quite remember the kid’s name but I think he was about my age. He also wielded this sword. I don’t know but they called it a gunblade. It was a sword but it can turn into a gun. Pretty cool huh? Day by day, these dreams have been getting interesting.

Chapter 1

Kentaro was in his room, asleep. Minutes passed and his alarm clock rang. Kentaro quickly sta up and rubbed the back of his head.
“Oh man. Another dream.†sighed Kentaro.
He got out of bed and got dressed into his school uniform. Once Kentaro got things together for school, he headed downstairs to eat breakfast.
“Good Morning Kentaro.†greeted Miyuki.
“Hey, morning Miyuki.†said Kentaro, sitting down at the table.
“Morning Kentaro.†said Amaya, eating her breakfast.
“Kentaro you better hurry up and eat, before you’re late for school.†said Miyuki.
“And before Dad comes and tries to ‘train’ you again.†said Amaya.
Kentaro finished his breakfast and left the house.
“See you guys later!†he shouted from outside.
Once Kentaro got to school, he went to his class and met up with his friends.
“Hey Kentaro, good morning.â€
“Hey Rai. How’s it going?†said Kentaro.
“Good Morning Kentaro!†waved a young girl named Roxanne.
“Hey Kentaro.†greeted Roxanne’s best friend, Aria.
Roxanne and Aria were with another friend of Kentaro named Enzo. As the group talked, the class’s teacher, Mrs. Yamazaki, came into the classroom.
“Alright class take your seats.†said Mrs. Yamazaki. “We have a lot to cover today.â€
As Mrs. Yamazaki began the class, a young girl was coming down the hall. She entered the class Kentaro and the others are in.
“I’m sorry I’m late.†she said.
“It’s ok. Just don’t make a habit out of it. Oh wait you’re the new student. Am I correct?†asked Mrs. Yamazaki.
“Yes.†responded the girl.
“What was your name again?†asked Mrs. Yamazaki.
“Kaori Hitsugaya.†she responded.
“Alright Kaori, you’re on the role. Go head and take that empty seat right next to Kentaro.†said Mrs. Yamazaki.
Kaori nodded and took her seat. Mrs. Yamazaki continued the class.

An hour later the bell rang for lunch. Kaori was getting out of her seat to go to lunch, until Roxanne stopped her.
“Kaori, where are you going?†asked Roxanne.
“Um, to go eat lunch.†responded Kaori.
“Why don’t you eat with us?†suggested Roxanne.
“Uh, ok sure.†said Kaori.
“Great!†said Roxanne happily. “Oh by the way, my name’s Roxanne.â€
“And I’m Aria.†greeted Aria.
Roxanne, Kaori, and Aria left their classroom and went outside where everybody else were. Kentaro, Rai, and Enzo were outside as well. They were going up to two other friends of their’s until Roxanne called them.
“Kentaro, Rai, Enzo, over here!†called Roxanne.
“Hello ladies.†said Enzo.
“Hey, have you guys met Kaori?†asked Roxanne.
“Actually no. I’m Enzo. He’s Rai.†said Enzo.
“Hey.†said Rai.
“And that’s Kentaro.†said Enzo. “By the way, don’t feel offended if Kentaro gives you bad attitude. He does that to everybody.â€
Kentaro walked up to Enzo and hit him on the head.
“Hey, no I don’t. Hey, nice to meet you. Welcome to Alendale High.†he told Kaori.
“O-oh thank you.†said Kaori.
Kentaro turned around and went with his other friends. Rai and Enzo followed him. Kaori was a little puzzled by the way Kentaro acted.
“It’s ok Kaori. Kentaro is always like that.†assured Aria.
“But there can be times where he’s sweet and caring.†included Roxanne.
Roxanne and Aria turned around and continued their lunch. Kaori looked at Kentaro for a while. She then turned around and followed Roxanne and Aria.

School hours passed and the bell finally rang. Roxanne, Aria, and Kaori said bye and headed home. Kentaro, Rai, and Enzo did the same. As Kaori was on her way home, she was passing a group of men. As she passed by them, the group of men began to look at her. Kaori was feeling uncomfortable but she tried her best to ignore them.
“Hey, where are you going, beautiful?†one of the men asked.
Kaori began to walk faster. But then the group of men began to follow her. Kaori turned around while walking, she began to get terrified. When she looked back forward, two men were standing in her way. Kaori stopped walking. She faced all of the men. All of a sudden two of the men grabbed Kaori.
“Oh please! I beg of you, please don’t!†pleaded Kaori.
“Now, now, beautiful, it won’t take long.†said one of the men.
As he got closer to Kaori, someone came running, jumped up, and kicked the man, sending him away from Kaori.
“Now, how can four guys take advantage of an innocent 15 year old?†asked the boy that saved Kaori.
“K-Kentaro....†said Kaori.
“Who the hell are you?†asked one of the men.
“No, the real question is, who the hell do you guys think who you are to try and take advantage of a young girl?†asked Kentaro.
The two men that were holding Kaori, let her go and began to fight with Kentaro. Kaori dropped to the floor and looked up at Kentaro. Kentaro kicked one man against a wall. And elbowed the other in the face. The last one was behind Kentaro. The man took a knife that was in his jacket. Kaori saw him take out the knife. She got up and jumped on the man’s back.
“No!†shouted Kaori.
Kentaro quickly turned around when he heard Kaori. The man pushed Kaori off his back. She landed on the floor. Kentaro punched the man in the face then kicked him, sending him to where the first guys Kentaro kicked, was. Kentaro looked at all four men to make sure they were either unconscious or couldn’t get up. He walked up to Kaori and held out his hand to help her up. Kaori had her hand over her head for a moment. She then looked up at Kentaro’s hand then at him.
“Are you ok?†asked Kentaro.
“Yes.†said Kaori, grabbing Kentaro’s hand to get up. “And thank you, so much.â€
“No problem. I wasn’t going to let them take advantage of you.†said Kentaro grabbing his bag and Kaori’s bag as well.
“Do you want me to walk you home?†asked Kentaro.
“O-oh, sure. Thank you.†responded Kaori.
“I really donâ want you to be alone. They might end up getting up and try something again.†said Kentaro, putting his hands into his pockets.

After a while Kentaro and Kaori finally arrived at Kaori’s house.
“Thank you Kentaro. For walking me home and because you saved me today.†said Kaori.
“Again, no problem.†said Kentaro.
Kentaro turned around and began to leave Kaori’s front door.
Thank you, Kentaro. thought Kaori.
Kaori turned around and went inside her house.

 

Nice story, i've edited it in a few spots where i think you could correct. Not really sure about a title and I see your predicament....

 

Thanks for editing a few parts.Yeah the title I gave it one but now I don't like it.I put A New Fate,A Rising Hero.But I don't like it anymore.I'm still confused on what to put instead of that one.

 

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