Witch's Apology (poem)

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  1. Dawn King's Apprentice

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    khchick55 recommended for me to put this up. It is short and it has to do with Chain of Memories.
    Witch's Apology​

    Part 1​

    I'm so sorry for the things I've done
    I really want to meet you, but not like this
    If I ever continue to do this,
    your heart will break like the puppet Vexen made

    I knew you couldn't forget her,
    She's too special to you to even forget about her
    I knew it was better for you
    to figure it out on your own than me telling straight to you

    That very little, first meeting sprouts a friendship
    Unlike I could ever create
    Even without my control, we would be friends

    You were the only person who has ever been nice to me
    "I won't hurt Sora!"
    What I said back there, it was true.
    You have a kind, just, gentle heart
    That truly makes you worthy of the Keyblade

    I am a witch because I can manipulate those around you
    Do you really think me harming you,
    Makes me a bad person?
    No, I wouldn't think so too.

    I wish… us, you, me, Kairi, and Riku, have a life just like on Destiny Islands
    Just like how I created your false memories into a reality
    Wouldn't that be nice?

    I'm her shadow, and there's no way changing that fact
    The promises I put in your memory is my selfish desire to meet you
    Or because of my insecurity seeking a protector, someone like you

    I need comments on this. I'm not a poet but I think this how this person feels. (If they have any.)
     
  2. venster You never heard of me, but I pop in time to time

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    wow, that's awesome! I love it how it is really in character. =D
     
  3. Princess Rapunzel Flower, gleam and glow

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    I love it, Dawn. Namine apologying for what she had done to Sora. It's so sad, I want to cry. But it also reminds me of a song I heard. So I might make a video on it. If it was posted on your Fanfiction.net profile, I'd review it.
     
  4. Peyton Goddess Of Love ♥

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    Well it is pretty good, it could have rhymed(sp?) a little more.
    But it's pretty good with describing feelings.
     
  5. Dawn King's Apprentice

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    I wasn't focused on rhyming in the first place. I'll improve over the summer.