A fun poem I came up with. I see this in a boy/girl's image. At a very young age. Windy day I wore my hat, my coat and my backpack. All ready to go to school. But when I looked out the window... I saw... The wind, the leaves, the trees... And plenty more. I took a deep breath and held the knob. Turned it 'round until it made a "click" sound. I said my goodbye's before I left off. Stepped outside..boy what a rush! A gust of wind hit my cheek. The leaves flying like they were surfing. The trees blowing, almost as if they were dancing. As for me... I was freezing! I took a few steps and felt a chill. Never thought the day would be this windy. I looked around and saw some other residents, walking up along the sidewalk. Most of them were walking to school. I joined in, I didn't want to be late. Again. As I walked and walked. The wind blew harder and harder. Almost as if it hated me. I shrouded in my coat, hiding my mouth. I wanted to breath out, and let my warm breath reach out. Only for warmth. That's all. From what I've experienced, the weather was windy. Although I don't read the news. That doesn't mean I shouldn't dress appropriatly.
I like the idea behind the poem. However, if you're going to make it be in the eyes of a small child, I wouldn't use such sophisticated words. It seems silly to say to use "smaller words" but I think that it would help your poem sound more like a little kid, which is what I thought you were going for. That's about the only thing :3
