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  1. Very Berry Gummi Ship Junkie

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    More of this I cannot
    take?
    Have they not realized that I have
    learned my mistake?
    I am tired of this act that they find
    amusing.
    All their lies and jokes make everything
    more confusing.
    Why do they try so hard to
    ruin my life?
    Every little comment strikes my
    heart like a knife.
    I get the fact that I am not
    wanted.
    No matter what I do everyday
    I am still taunted.
    What did I do to
    deserve this?
    My life is like a never
    ending abyss.
    All of it is stupid because
    in the end no one will win.
    I see this as pointless so
    why did they begin?
    Because of them I dread
    going to school.
    I loathe how they think
    they are all cool.
    I may not dress baggy or
    listen to rap.
    Does that give them the right
    to talk crap?
    I am tired and sick of
    it all.
    Will they not give it a rest once
    and for all?

    here is another poem i wrote its not very good and its for sora 13 here ya go alex i know its not good and i'm suppose to be cheering you up but...this is what came to mind first but dont worry i'm working on something that will cheer you up :D
     
  2. Valium Hollow Bastion Committee

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    WOW thats is awesome 10/10 REP FOR JOO
     
  3. Sabby Sleepy Panda Assassin

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    Very nice poem. I feel like that sometimes too. Still very well done
     
  4. Very Berry Gummi Ship Junkie

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    AWWWW thanks you guys i'm glad you like it 2 some kid in my advisory said it was great 2 thanks :D
     
  5. Nailpolish <3 Hollow Bastion Committee

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    Beautiful =] Your poetry is really nice, and the rhythm is perfect.

    I get what you mean. <3
     
  6. Alex C: Kingdom Keeper

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    lol



    thats so funny imo becuase 1. its true and 2. you thought of meh D:



    thanks :D ill print it out and put it on my room



    (oh god im going to make a paper filled up wall agian x3
     
  7. Very Berry Gummi Ship Junkie

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    well this rly isnt happening to me its for a friend but yeah i get the feeling 2 and it isnt great :(
     
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    I like the rhythm, but many of the words rhyming are repetitive and stale.
     
  9. Very Berry Gummi Ship Junkie

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    lol is it gonna b filled up with ur poems this time ?? and glad you liked it
     
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