Traditional Art Why you section be dead?

Something for you guys to play with =P
http://ShinobiOfTheDark.deviantart.com/art/Joscelyn-121232817

CnC plz. And don't point out the obvious fact that I f*cked up on the clothes.

 

Everything needs work, not a lot or anything major but it all needs work. The nose bothers me in particular because it looks so odd. Look to past art in all styles that depict the human figure for help. It's not bad looking I suppose but it is unpolished and unrefined which will only be remedied by practice.

 

Yeah, it's been ages since I CGed a drawing, I'm not that used to drawing stuff on the computer from scratch either. Thanks for the critique though.

 

even though some points were already pointed out by Jiku Neon, i guess i will have my say

her nose is odd, lowering the point of the nose will help alot. her left breast is a little off, try moving it more to the right. Her head seems to have no definite shape, try making or sketching her head before adding hair *if you already did that then my bad*her lip is also bugging me, because it makes it look like she is whimpering, which i dont think you were aiming for, and her collarbone is a little low, try raising that up more too.

sorry about all the negative things but i honestly thing your coloring and shading is really nice, better than i could do. and sorry for the horrible grammar


and i just noticed that you did this on computer, so i guess what i just said would probably more help on paper then computer


*this is reptar btw*

 

I think it's a nice start, but yes, the nose is kind of off. You might want to take out the dark line down the center of the nose and shade it a slightly darker line than the skin color you used so it matches up. Her right eye seems to also be slightly too far right and her lips are rather impossible to duplicate in real life. The hair could use some more definition so it doesn't look so flat and lifeless. Never been a fan of the eyebrows past the hair thing.. but that's anime so I won't mention beyond that. Her boob on the right too, the line should be dropped a couple cms since her body is slightly turned.

All in all though, the picture does not look bad and I am only critical of these areas because it looks like you have some genuine talent and were asking for opinions on how to fix it up more. Nice pic.