White Roses

I havent posted a poem on here for awhile, so go easy on me. But CnC are greatly neeeded : D

White Roses

You just say the three little words and I become memorized, follow the commands like a puppet, move a bit here and there and I begin to walk.

Why do I follow, why do I sweat? Why do
I even try to make you happy when you tear me down and down.

Yet those three little words can change it all, and I am under your control, under your command.

I am a slave to your non-existing love, forever under your grasp.

Whip, Snap, Moan, Yell. These are the pains that I have felt, you just smile and shine while I grey and deny this is fake. Yet like a bleach rose, this is only a cover up.

Your just a white rose, and roses die eventually.

 

good job :)

 

That was very deep! I liked it.

It had that 'aww' romance feeling, but hate in it. Nice!

 

Thank you, that was the feeling I was hoping to get across

 

Then you hit the nail on the head =D

Great job for not posting here in a while either.

 

Love! Love! Love! I really like this poem, you're so good at getting emotions across in your writing. I loved the line "all roses die eventually" with the rose being a representation of a love, then bringing in death. Great job Memento-San! I love it<3

 

Thank you, I really like this poem alot because of the emotions ^__^