What am I trying to say?

I'm not particularly good at poetry or anything, but I do dabble in it from time to time.​

I never write anything good enough to post, but if I do, I suppose it's to go here.​

The Minstrel Doll

A time in a city of ruby and crystal​

Sang a lone doll as a minstrel​

Who did not often its job​

None a time did it sob​

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Once new, the doll was​

Eventually tainted because​

A hand played with it too many a time​

And then it had began its silent rhyme​

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Made of sturdy material to go on​

Even through the most bleak of dawns​

It holds a facade of happy and independence​

Showcasing emotion would be only a hinderance ​

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And so day by day does the doll wear​

Thinking that silence alone is fair​

To live in this city of cruelness and care​

It is being alone that causes the tear​

 

This is a pretty good piece. I think you should dabble a bit more ^_^

There is one thing that threw me of however, and it's nothing major. In the last verse, your rhyming all the line ends together. However, in the previous verses you would rhyme lines 1 and 2, then 3 and 4 separately. So when I got to the end and they all rhymed together it threw me off a bit. It doesn't take away from my respect for the poem, though it made it a bit awkward to finish.

All in all, great job ;)

 

Nice poem (:
Although the rhyming at the end did throw me off.
Overall, it's pretty good.