this is a book i started awhile ago, and haven't been bothered writing, so i'll post here to see if you think i should write it. Chapter one: True Friends A boy listened silently, to the sounds of the forest. He loved to listen to the noises of the forest. He loved it deeply, to the point where he was almost ready to just leave and never come back. Almost. There was one reason why he stayed… “Dodge, where are you?” came the voice of a young girl. Dodge turned to see his friend Viper looking for him. She was wearing a dark blue jacket, light blue short sleeved shirt and light blue pants. She soon found him and ran towards him. He smiled wildly, wondering why she always asked where he was if soon after she would find him anyway. Once she got to him she gave him a brief hug and sat down on the log beside him. “I love this forest” Dodge said to her. “I know” she said softly “sometimes it seems as if the forest itself is a person, offering comfort in every way and that the only other thing that it can’t give you is…” “Is the person you love, right?” he said silently. “Right” she replied in the same manner. They both started to feel awkward and were both grateful when the moon signaled them to go home. “It’s getting late and I think that we should get home, I mean come on who honestly trusts two fifteen year olds in a forest on their own.” Viper said hoping that the longing that she felt wasn’t obvious in her voice. He agreed not knowing that they both felt the same longing for each other. They left the forest each wishing that the other knew how they felt but too scared to move upon their feelings. The next day Dodge awoke, not for the first time, thinking of Viper. He smiled as he remembered growing up. They had always been the best of friends, and were almost always together… -------------------------------------- Not very long is it>_< but i'll probably start writing it again now that it's holidays... will someone please comment! i understand that if you don't like it you don't like it but i'll never be able to fix it unless you give me feedback!
hahaha wow people are actually replying (Yay!:D) well, it took me forever to resist the temptation to turn everything violent so i'll try to continue but i'm going on vacation soon so i'll restart it when i get back!
It's good ^_^. The only thing I'd say about it is when she comes into sight, he's ment to ike her right? So you'd want to add stuff about the moonlight on her hair and the clothes would be more a powder blue or baby blue, things to make it seem 'softer'. But that's just me and romance writing isn't really a strong point for me. But other wise I can't wait to read more :D
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