Trei'd Mark'd Liar - The Riddle

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YBXFegjivGs

this is the vocal track for it
tell me what'cha think ^_^

 

Well...I'd definately get a more solid idea on what you want the people to hear, because at times I couldn't exactly get a feel for this...You're pretty good with vocal, but the screams...those could be changed to a more punkish scream or bettered, your choice.

As for the lyrics...those are good, so I won't tell you what to improve, because I found them really nice.

As for a band....how many members, and what do they play, so far?


I think you should atleast get a guitarist to do a track...but it be better if you didn't use that mic....it's a bit bad.

Overall...I believe you can do something good with this.

 

Could do with a little fine tuning, but good overall. I think that the screams being dragged out for a little longer would do good, but with music this definitely has potential.

 

thanks guys ^_^ and my type of music is more of a collision of soft rock punk and hard rock...screaming is a matter of personal taste i know not everyone likes it...its in this song to add to the emotion...which is confusion as to how i should feel about falling in love...weakened or strengthend...i so far have a rhythm guitarist and me on vocals and keyboard....i dont record those parts due to the mic being bad for anything but vocals...even at that its pretty messed up...its a rock band game mic...lol..but its the best i have right now...