Walking down this Autumn field I see the glimmer in your eyes And the smile in your heart Your arm is around me My heart's beating fast as we walk My palms have become sweaty You send me a comforting smile And I smile back You know that I'm nervous Is this what love feels like? You get nervous when you're around The one you love most? It makes me feel nautious But yet, I like it It makes me want to be closer to you Gently I lay my head upon your shoulder And you pull me a bit closer The autumn breeze gently blowing against my face If this is what love truely is Then I guess that means one thing: I've really fallen for you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I've been having alot of boy problems lately as most people can tell... so I've been writing many love poems lately... I hope you like it ^^
It's not bad, but no matter how I try to read it, I just can't get the flow to sound smooth. Particularly this part could be re-worded to make it flow better: Other than that, there aren't any major interruptions in the flow, but some parts do sound a bit "Tacky" if you know what I mean. Content-wise, there's nothing wrong with the poem though, just work on making it flow a bit better.
Thematically, it is placed very well. The descriptions are great. A few misarrangements of words but that's almost nothing compared to the actual poem. 9.999999999/10
