The World Ends With Sora

Sweet. Keep up the good work.

 

OMFG my characters get focus soon? Sweetness. Or not, considering you aren't in a particular order. But still, sweetness for the people whose characters are in this. I can imagine how hard it is writing a 'your characters included' story. The chapter from before was pretty awesome. I bet you've got some good stuff up your sleeve. *thumbs up*

 

The only weird thing is...I actually talk the way you're typing Base...0_0....Who are you, Xaale? Are you friggen spying me or something? TELL ME!

And...that explains why my back was feeling like it was burning for some odd reason...-_-".... You is voodoo Mastah!

Although, there's one error, but you can't and don't have to change it:

I actually know very little about TWEY...and Shades is somewhat of an authority on it....so, that's generally the only thing that escapes reality, pretty much...0_o...

Great story!

 

whoa......seriously?......>_>...that's freaky.....

 

Yeah that right I better be first. Lol, I'm jsut kidding. Geez :sweatdrop:

Thanks, it took a while to write so I hope you like it...or else :P jk

 

not a bad chapter Xaale, but there were a few minor grammatical errors that stuck out and ripped me from the stories focus, but other than that not too bad. I was wondering how you were going to pull off combining TWEWY and Kh with OC, but you are doing it in a way i wasn't expecting. Nice reference to Neku btw, it really shows the progression of this as a sequel of sorts to the game.

 

Dude, you care about that grammer and the pouution [I know I spell ed that wrong], adn the spelling, if it's s good stroy who cares!.

 

...i'm going to pretend that was a joke.

The reason i point things like this out, is so the author can correct mistakes and help them to advance their story and overall become a better writer....that's kind of the point of critiquing. If I really wanted, I could tear any story, even mine apart and tell you things that are wrong with it that other's overlook. It's what i'm going into school to do, so sorry if it bugs you that i have to nitpick.

 

I understand what you mean..sometimes grammatical errors bug me too...and typos as well but typos are typos.

 

Thanks Shades, it's so good that you are really beating down on me with spelling and grammer. No, really. I am a grammer freak, but even sometimes I can mess up, especially if I am writing. Don't get mad at Shades, guys...

And yes, I do hope that post was a joke YOSHA >.> jk I know it was one.

Edit: You know what's bugging me, though? (Well, not really bugging me but) I don't mind that you're nitpicking me...but watch your own spelling and grammer. Read over your last post and you'll see...

*coughs that it's needs to be capitilized*

:D

 

Pssh....it's just one thing. Sometimes I press teh shift key and then release it before it has a chance to capitalize anything.

 

Lol I wasn't really bugged I just wanted to point it out.

The same thing happens to everyone.​

 

Yeah.....true.....

 

Yeah sorry, shades. It was.

 

*hugs Yosha* We know it was :3

Anyway, I've started it, which I think I already said *goes to check after finished posting* I'll have it done by...errr Tuesday?

I'm going on vacation to Shelter Island (NY) tomorrow :3 I'll be back Sunday.​

 

All right...that's cool. Take your time and have a good trip.

 

Yep it is.*hugs back* X3 Take your time, hope you have fun!

 

Okay, I'm leaving in five minutes :3 anyway, I'll be planning the rest of the next chapter while I am there, mkay?

Have a nice weekend everyone~​

 

See ya around, Xaale. Just remember, if you don't come back from wherever your going in 7 days, you risk erasure.....Ok, I have nothing to back that up....but still.....HURRY BACK!

 

Username: Keyblade Spirit
Character's Name: Kespirin (Ke-speer-in)
Character's Age: Unknown, but looks about 20.
Character's Gender: Male
How Character Fights (what kind of psychs?): Uses hands and feet to deliver fast blows to the Noise. Fusion attack is a huge burst of light.
Apperance: Wears a white cloak similar to Org XIII.
Character's Entry Fee: His ability to unlock any door.
Character's Home Country and or State: Unknown
Backstory: He was actually the Keyblade before Sora died. Because his Master died, so did he, and has found Sora and made a pact with him to regain his true form when he is ressurected.