Well, since I tried doing the one were they went to Spira and that went horrible, this will be the actual story so nobody read my previous garbage. This is for 01_Kairi who has been following my story since I started writting it and for my little sis who is always my biggest fan! Chapter 1: Surprises Riku remembered the King telling them that time between world's isn't relative. No kidding, Riku thought as he walked along the beach on his home of Destiny Islands. He looked out at the sun setting, recalling the previous couple days. When he left Sora and Kairi, Riku had no idea what he was going to do. After travelling a bit and defeating countless heartless, he ran into King Mickey. The King had asked him to join a group he was started that dedicated itself to fighting heartless. Riku signed up without hesitation. So, he started to travel around, seeing many worlds and fighting heartless. Slowly, the creatures of darkness started to thin out but they always seemed to come back somewhere else. Time was running out to solve the problem. Then, Riku went to Disney Castle to find that King Mickey was missing. No one knew where he was. It was complete chaos. So, he decided to ask help from a very good friend. Riku went to Destiny Island but what he fround wasn't good. Riku stepped out of the Corridor to Darkness which he travelled through and gazed around his home world. It looked the same as when he left. He walked down the path to Sora's house, keeping his violet eyes peeled for any signs of trouble. It had only been a year, as far as he knew, and Riku hadn't changed much. His silver hair still had black streaks in it and all that really changed was that he was bout two inches taller. However, he soon found out that his best friend had changed alot. Riku continued to walk and turned to Sora's house. Instantly, a boy, around 12 ran out of the house. Riku raised an eyebrow. It wasn't Felix, his half-brother but the kid looked familiar. He had spikey hair that was brown-red in colour. It sorta looked like...but it couldn't be. Riku walked up to the door when something caught his senses. It was a heartless and it was a little tough. Probably around five of them. Sora won't mind if I bust his door down to save him, he thought with a smile. He kicked the door and it flew open, while his keyblade appeared in his hand. Riku ran into the kitchen, slashing two heartless. He didn't even notice the other two people and ran into the living room, killing the last three with precise accuracy. "You haven't lost your touch," a voice came from behind him. Riku turned around and nearly dropped his keyblade. "And you haven't gotten any different either, eh?" Riku's eyes widenned. "Okay, what happenned? I haven't been gone that long," he said more to himself. It was like looking at an older Sora and Kairi. Kairi had long red hair that almost came to her waist and was almost as tall as Riku but Sora was a little more different. His spikey hair has deflated a bit so that it didn't look like it was everywhere and he was taller than Riku now. Kairi ran over and gave him a hug but Riku was still in shock. He pushed her back after a few seconds still staring at them. "Um...yeah. I must be dreaming. All this battling is going to my head," he said with a chuckle. Kairi smiled at him. "No, I figured it out. See, you've probably been travelling to so many world's that time between them is having little affect on you while here...well...it's been around fifteen years." Now Riku really did drop his keyblade. It fell to the floor with a clang. "F-fifteen years? N-no way," he stuttered, shaking his head. Sora nodded, leaning on the table. "Yeah, that's what we're thinking and here's you who's only one year older," he said and laughed. Riku smiled weakly. "W-well...what's happenned?" he asked and the keyblade at his feet disappeared. Sora sat down in a chair and Kairi sat beside him. "Well, Kairi and I are married now." Riku only nodded, unable to speak. "And we have a son. You might have saw him running outside. We both finished school, and right now...well... I have a job but Kairi is staying home to look after our son." Riku sighed, unable to take it all in. "Well, you've been busy," he said sarcasticly. "All I've done if fight heartless which hasn't been going well. Oh yeah," he said remembering why he came in the first place. "I need your help. The King is missing and without his we're done for," he said, jumping up. Sora and Kairi looked at each other. "You'd better tell him," Kairi muttered to Sora. Riku heard it easily. "Tell me what?" he asked, knowing whatever it was, it was bad news. Sora sighed. "Riku, thing have changes alot for us. I can't help you save the King. Let's just put it that way," he said and started to walk away. Riuk sent a blaze of fire blocking Sora in. "Sora, what are you talking-" he stopped sudennly. That was why Sora wasn't fighting the heartless and why he really wasn't happy to see Riku. Riku's keyblade came to his hands and he looked at it. "You...you can't use the keyblade anymore," he said, throat dry. Sora nodded. "Yeah. It happenned a couple years after we came back home. Heartless came to the island and Kairi and I tried to fight them but..." "But the keyblade wouldn't come to you," Riku finished for him and the flames around them disappeared and his keyblade vanished. "What are we going to do now?" he asked, confused. Sora smiled. "Well, I may not be able to use the keyblade, anymore but we hoped that this thing would be sorta...blood related," he said and Riku smiled too. "So you think your son will be able to," Riku said, trying not to sound too happy. Sora nodded. "Yeah. but I really don't want to tell Thay about this." Riku almost laughed. "Thay?" he started but Kairi shot him a look and he ended it there. "I've got an idea. Just send him out to the island tonight and I'll deal with him there," he said and vanished in a corridor. "You better be gentle with him Riku!" Kairi shouted and they could hear Riku laugh as he left. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Well that is much better than the garbage other story!!!
Umm...Okay then. BACK TO THE STORY COMMENT!!!!! I thought it was good. You could explain more with the emotions, and the detail of the whole picture. Like for that chapter, you could have explained the house and then beach. Great story. I will definatly be following this story! :D
Thank you for the help! I love people who do that, instead of saying, good job they actually tell you what you can do better. Many thanks! :D Anyway, this chapter is going to be a little...different then my last ones. And the thing about the garbage...well...I was told that the story was a little thick and I admit it was completely off topic. I looked over it and realized that it wasn't very good and I could do better so I stopped it there. As for the detail, well I wanted to keep chapter one down to around a thousand words. Chapter II: The New Keyblade Hero Thay jumped off his boat, looking around. His father had told him to come for some wierd reason. He didn't explain why he just told him to go. Thay walked down to the beach and felt the wind blow in his face gently. It was peaceful...the sun setting...the waves barely grazing the shore. "So, your the son of my best friends?" a voice came from behind him and Thay whipped around. A man stood there, around the age of nineteen. He had sivoer-blue hair with black streaks in it and piercing violet eyes. He wore a black shirt with a yellow and white vest over top that was torn at the shoudlers. He also wore blue pants that looked worn from many battles. "W-who are you?" Thay stammered taking a step back. The man shook his head. "Fear. To be expected. Anyway, your mom and dad have sent me to well...ask for your help." Thay almost laughed. "Me? For help?" "Well, actaully, I need your help. Anyway, you would have found out even if I told you. After all, your dad was one of the greatest." Thay was very lost. "My dad? The greatest at what?" The man gave a chuckle. "To think, his own son doesn't even know," he said and a bright flash of light blinded Thay for a second. He looked up and the man was holding what looked like a key. It was huge though! The blade, if that's what it was, was a sivler colour and the hilt was yellow. The end of it looked like it had a crown on it but Thay wasn't sure. "Here, catch," the man said and threw it to him. Thay cuaght it and gripped onto the handle. The sword felt like it was made for him and a strange power seemed to emmit from it. A word rang in Thay's head. "Keyblade," he muttered to himself. The man walked over. "I'm glad we've got that straightened out. By the way, the name's Riku, keyblader of darkness and your dad's best friend." ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Sorry for the short chapter but I have relatives over so I have to go.
Well. That was different. Never really expected that. Not that there's anything wrong with that. I don't know, it's still too early to tell. Oh well, continue and here are the wasted seconds back.
Chapter III: Story Time Thay looked up at him. "Riku," he said as though trying it out. "This...this is a keyblade?" Riku nodded and started to walk along the beach, Thay following him. "Yeah. A while back, your dad was a hero who saved many worlds." Thay was in shock. "Really? My dad? Who are you anyway?" he asked, backing up. "And what's up with worlds, as in plural? Are there more than one? And how come your the keyblader of darkness? And why hasn't my dad told me any of this?" he asked, quickly. Riku sighed. "About that...Well your dad didn't tell you because he didn't want you to make the same mistake I did. Yes there are more than worlds than this one, you'll see them soon enough. And I'm the keyblader of darkness because I gave into the darkness." Thay was a little speachless. "Right... I still don't get it. What mistake did you make?" Riku didn't say anything. He sighed again. "Let's put it this way kid. If some guy ever offers you infinate power, say no, alright?" Thay nodded weakly. "So...uh...do I get to see the worlds?" Riku nodded. "Soon enough. I have to train you first," he said and black lights swirled around and met at Riku's hand. A blade that was black, red and purple appeared in his hand. It looked like it had a wing at the end of it. Thay looked at it with wide eyes. "Whoa! How come yours is so good?" Riku chuckled. "I've given up alot to get this blade. More than you can imagine." And that ended the conversation. Thay looked up at him. "So, when you said training, what did you mean?" he asked, a little nervous. Riku shrugged, smiling. "A little of this a little of that," he said and grinned down at him. Thay gulped a little scared.
Sorry about that! Anyway, here's another chapter. Chapter IV: Fear Riku watched as Thay attempted the exercises Riku assigned to him. It was more a test to see how well Thay could fight and what his weaknesses were. It was boring work since Riku didn't actually test him hard. Thay managed to do well on all the tests except when Riku asked him to go into the cave which he and Sora played in as children. Thay was a little scared to go in but was fine once Riku showed him the inside. Three hours later, Riku was sitting on a branch o f the paupu tree, thinking about what to do. Thay came up from behind him and leaned against the tree. " They didn't say anything for aorund five minutes. "You are afraid," Riku said finally. Thay looked up. "Afriad? Of what? I'm not scared of anything!" he said confidently. He took a step back and smiled, proudly. "I can take anything you've got to throw at me," he taunted. Riku laughed. "Oh, really? Do you think it's a good idea to tell me that?" he asked with a sly smile. Thay held his stance hard. "Alright," Riku jumped down from the branch. "Let's see how brave you are." Black flames sprouted out of the ground. Thay took a step back and the kingdom key appeared in his hand. His whole vision went pitch black and he couldn't see a thing. "W-what's going on?" he shouted to no one, clearly scared. He couldn't see Riku but he heard him. "Everyone has a fear of something. Your fear is the unknown," the darkness started to disppear at his words and the flames vanished. Thay was almost shaking. "How did you do that?" Riku sighed and sat down on the branch again. "It isn't hard but what we need to focus on is you right now. With you scared of the very thing you will fight, it doens't help matters." Thay straightened. "What can I do?" Riku chuckled at his words. "Do you really want to know? Alright then. Let's begin."
Riku sighed and sat down on the branch again. "It isn't hard but what we need to focus on is you right now. With you scared of the very thing you will fight, it doens't help matters." ---- This was my fav part! ^ Hmmm... makes me wonder... tis Riku scared of the unknown too?
Someone is very smart! Actually, this is hidden in the Kingdom Hearts series but there are clues that can help. Riku isn't afraid of the unknown but he is afraid of death. Like the first Kingdom Hearts, Riku wasn't afraid to give up everything just so he could leave the islands. But in Kingdom Hearts 2, he realizes the importance of his friends. Anyway, here's the next chapter! Chapter V: Leaving for the Fourth Time After three days of training, Riku gave Thay a day off for him to enjoy. He walked along the beach of the islands, a little glad to be home. Still, he wished that he could leave and help the King save the universe. Again. He stopped and gazed out to the horizon, watching the sun rise up above the water. Everything seemed so peaceful. Something brushed against his foot and he looked down. It was a bottle with a letter in it. Riku picked it up and stared down at it. It had the King's seal. He pooped it open and unrolled the paper. Riku, I ohpe this reaches ya, pal. We got big trouble. The rest of the Organization has been attacking many worlds, gathering up tonnes of Nobodies and heartless. They aren't doing it for fun either. They're gathering an army. We need you and Thay to hurry up and get here as soon as possible. King Mickey Riku dropped the paper. An army? They could barely keep the heartless and the Nobodies under control now but an army would devestate them It would be all over. A minute later, Riku was outside Sora's door. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Riku banged on the door. "Thay!" The door creacked open and Thay peeked out of it. "Thay, we're leaving," he said quickly. Thay opened it all the way. "Leaving? You mean-" "Yes! We're going to Hollow Bastion to help," Riku finished for him. "Meet me on the shore in half an hour. You won't need anything but your keyblade," he said and took off down to the beach. Thay couldn't speak. He had been so excited to leave and explore other worlds but now it gave him a sick feeling. He sighed and closed the door. "Thay? Are you okay?" Kairi's voice came. Thay walked into the room where his mom and dad were sitting in. He gave a slight nod and sat down, unable to speak. Sora sighed. "You're leaving. Don't worry. You'll have a good time. Well, maybe you won't but you'll come home safe," he said and walked over to Thay. He took off the crown necklace he always wore and put it aorund Thay's own nock. "Here. You keep it. Be safe, okay?" Thay looked up and gave a weak smile, his eyes watering. Kairi came over and hugged him. "You'll come home. I know you will." Thay nodded and Kairi stood up. "You better get going," Sora added and Thay stood up, confidently and walked oout the door giving one last glance at his childhood home. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Riku paced the beach, thinking. If they went to Hollow Bastion and fought, they would probably die. If they stayed, then the worlds would be overrun and they would still die. Still, better to die fighting. Thay came up from behind him. "I'm ready," he said confidently. Riku smiled and opened up a Corridor of Darkness. "Let's hope so."
Muhahahaha!!! I'm apart of a secret group that stalks KH stories like this. Your story is very good. OH CRAP!!!!! I wasn't supposed to post. The Superior is going to fire me for sure!!! Hey, listen don't tell any one I posted, okay?!
I have to say guys, you guys are the best! I mean that from deep in my heart. I never thought anyone would read my story and actually get tolod by a secret group member *wink wink* that my story was good. I sure you've read plenty of Kingdom Hearts stories so you know what's good and what isn't and so fa, I haven't heard anything bad about my story which I think is incredible! I'm very busy doing homework so I unfortuanately can't put up the next topic but I'll put it up tomorrow.
I cracked up when I read this part: Riku picked it up and stared down at it. It had the King's seal. He pooped it open and unrolled the paper. I know it was a type-o... but it so darn funny because its all innocent like... ^_^ I made me giggle.
Thank yo.... Agh!!! Thee Superior is sooo going to fire me!!! Listen anyone who reads this... pretend you didn't!! Your story is exciting by the way+mumbles something incoherent that sounds like it has the wored fired in it+
This is good. Keep writing! I kind of wish that it wasn't Sora's son. I like Sora. I want him to be along too. :(
I'm glad someone caught that! I went to the bathroom for a second and my sister changes that word! I didn't realize until I pressed post so that kinda sucked. And yeah, I was a little sad that Sora was gone but you know, he had his time. Now it's time for a new generation. Well, I'm starting another story since I desperately need ideas for this one. My new story is kinda funny in a way. Check it out if you guys have time.
