I am currently in the process of writing a fantasy trilogy called "The Age of Magic" Book one, in the trilogy, will be called "Birth of a Hero". Below is the opening to Chapter 1. If you ask me, I think that I did a good job here. This is only the opening. I will not be writing any more here. Any plot details I will be keeping to myself. All I'm going to say is that the main character dreaming right now. I didn't describe what the main character looks like because that happens after this scene. Feel free to make comments. :) Chapter 1 (Opening Only!) Tristan stood glued to the spot as he stared down at what had used to be his village. There had been a massacre here. Bodies of men, women, and children alike, littered the ground. It wasn’t a pretty sight. Some had been beheaded. Others were stabbed. And a rare few appeared to have been bitten and clawed to death. The villagers bodies lay on the cold autumn ground; their blood painting the dirt, beneath them, a crimson red. Suddenly, a dull orange light bounced on and off the bodies and ground alike. With difficulty, Tristan managed to draw his eyes away from the dead bodies and stare at the cause of the light. His eyes only widened. The village had suddenly gone up in flames. But it was not the fires that had caused Tristan’s eyes to widen. It was the sinister voice that had suddenly entered his head. Everybody’s dead! Everybody’s dead! EVERYBODY’S DEAD! Said the voice. It had a demonic sound to it, like a cross between a snake’s hiss and an eagle’s screech. “NOOOOO! Stop it! Stop it! STOP IT!” Tristan yelled while clutching his forehead with his right hand and shaking his head. “GET OUT OF MY HEAD! GET OUT OF MY HEAD!” The voice made a screeching hiss of a laugh. You have nowhere to run! You cannot hide! A clap of thunder came from above. Something wet dripped onto Tristan’s forehead. Water suddenly began pouring from the sky. No, not water. Blood. Tristan felt his own blood turn to ice. He was getting splattered in a downpour of blood! A giant shadow suddenly loomed over Tristan. Slowly he turned his head to view the source of the shadow. He knew what the source was, but he had to check anyway. Two blood red eyes stared directly at Tristan. No, not at him, but into his soul. I see yoooooouuuuuuuu!
Sounds similar to the opening of a trilogy Ive read where the boy returns to find his village in flames and everybody dead and later becomes a hero <: Probably a coincidence, just saying. You should check over your work, you've mispelled "sight" in the first few lines. It's okay, you should try and effectively explain what is going on more though. Good going.
Everything is explained at over halfway through the book. It will create a twist in plot. I did check over my work, I just forgot which sight to use. thanks. :) And this is only a dream so what really happen was only vaguely similar.
....wow...bloody...and well I'm guessing if you need a bit of inspiration you can watch beserk. That will sure help you with all of this. *shudders* Well...it's short, so at the time being it's nice. It will take time to develop what you have here. So keep going...And we'll see were you'll take this.
I already have the entire first book thought out. The dream is only bloody. most of the book isn't like that.
Having something thought out and writing have a certain distance and are never the same thing. In fact...Well...it's nothing too important. I'm making a triology myself(but it's nothing to be made in books xD) And I have made small connections through the story's narrative and characters so that the stories are interlaced even when one doesn't even have any similarity to the others. A triology is much more complex to do. Just keep that in mind, ect.
I know, I've all ready wrote a rough draft for a comic book (something completely separate from this). How the story ended up being, for that, was basically the same, but how it came about was completely different from what I planned. I made sure I could finish that before I started writing this. Nothing ever turns out as planned when you write a book. I already know that things are going to change. But there are some key parts that I know will remain the same. See, I've thought this out ;)
I see. But it's still not that easy...you see having tidbits of idea that can only be expanded to a certain extent don't make a story. Example: Tristan gains a special power. He's not very brave but still sets out in a quest. <<<<< This is a blurb...that would need expansion and details. and it's best to not think of it on the spot. If you've got all covered, then no problem.
Yeah I know. That comic book was over 100 pages of script. It took over a year to get it done, but it worked, and It was pretty epic.
