The One.

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Spike, May 19, 2011.

  1. Spike H E R O

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    Don't ever tell anyone that I wrote something like this.
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    Tell me boy
    Will you see what I have seen?
    Let me know
    Will you be where I have been?
    Do you think
    You will go where I have gone?
    Don't you see?
    How these things were a part of me.....

    Where you'll go, boy, it won't matter none
    When you see the world
    You'll know what needs to be done
    It's all in front of you
    Don't let it pass you
    Just raise your fist high and say
    "I will be the one"
     
  2. Loxare Hollow Bastion Committee

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    very good. you could have kept to the a b a b rhyming scheme better, but it works well as a free verse too. just a question though: is this supposed to be in this section, or in the Poetry and Lyrics subforum?
     
  3. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    EPIC FAIL . . . at least on where you were supposed to put this. This should be in the poetry section. I liked the rythm of the whole thing and I like the way it's going or the point of the song. You should keep up the good work, in the poetry section.

    ~Moved lol