The NEW Organization XIII

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    The survivals of the organization, Xigbar, Xaldin, Saix, Demyx, Luxord and Larxene, are planing on reforming Organization XIII. They choose a leader, Xaldin, to direct them into succes.
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    Plot:
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    The NEW Organzation XIII is suppose to continue their old plan, to finally obtain a hear to fully exist and have emotions and feelings. And to conquer all worlds with their Nobody Wrath.
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    Prologue:
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    In Castle Oblivion, the surviving members dialogue in Nothing's Meeting...

    "We must take actions on recruting members!" Ordered Xaldin while floating one of hes lances
    "Indeed, we must order our "recruter" to take actions," Sarkasticly said Larxene while pointing Xigbar
    "Whats your problem ya piece of discharged watts!" Yelled Xigbar while poolishing hes sniper
    "Watch your language Xigbar!" Yelled Xaldin while pointing the lance to Xigbar
    "Hahaha! Its pretty funny this fight!" Laughed Luxord while playing solitare
    "Please be more mature Luxord, atleast Demyx is silent...for some time!" Said Saix while looking at Demyx
    "Don't get me involve Saix!" Yelled Demyx while touching hes sitar
    "Oh im so sorry! I din't ment to hurt ya!" Sarkasticly said Saix while laughting at Demyx

    Xaldin stays silent for a moment. The fight between the members begins to get discontrolled. Xaldin stands up...

    "SILENCE!" Yelled Xaldin while pointing all hes lances to everyone
    " I have had it with all your stupidity!" Yelled Xaldin while retiring the lances from everyone
    " You are all going to Twiligh Town and find some new members for the organzation, don't come back I repeat DON'T come back until you each have found a new member!" Yelled Xaldin while sitting on hes chair

    Everyone leaves. A portal opens and a teenaged boy comes out. The boy had a black hood similar to the organization's, he had brown eyes, brown spiky hair, white skin, a scar under hes right eye, a tatoo of a dragon on hes left arm and an ear ring on hes left ear...

    "Hello, im here for the organization meeting," Said the mysterious fellow while walking to the center
    "Yes come in, whats your name?" Asked Xaldin while looking at the fellow
    "Oh yes my name is Ledanix," Said the fellow while summoning hes weapon and shield

    Hes weapon, The Dragoon's Honorable Courage, a sword of unbelievable powers and hes shield, The Dragoon's Vicious Guardian, a powerful defender, both maded a great combo for a succesive battle. Ledanix and Xaldin stayed moments talking and talking...

    "So a nobody named Roxas that wields the sacred keyblade that once worked with the organization managed to destroy part of it?" Asked Ledanix while looking at Xaldin
    " Yes he was a powerful ally to us," Replied Xaldin while moving hes legs

    Xaldin and Ledanix stayed talking. After a moment, the members returned...

    "Welcome back!" Yelled Xaldin while rising to the air
    "We failed sir," Said everyone while sitting on their chairs
    "WHAT?!" Yelled Xaldin while summoning hes weapons
    "Please don't hurt us!" Screamed Demyx while hiding in a water shield
    "We searched everywhere but nothing sir," Said Saix while crossing hes legs
    "No matter, I have already a new recruit, everyone, meet Ledanix," Said Xaldin while floating in the air
    "Hello everyone!" Said Ledanix while waving hes sword
    "Now then, lets us start a little mission shall we?" Said Xaldin while descending to hes chair
    "Whats the mission sir?'" Asked Xigbar while scratching hes head
    "Our first mission, is a team mission, I will do the teams!" Said Xaldin while fixing hes hair
    "I wonder with who I will be with?" Asked Ledanix to himslef
    "Xigbar and Luxord," Said Xaldin while pointing both Xigbar and Luxord
    "WHAT?!" Both yelled
    "Any problem with my decision?" Asked Xaldin while pointing with hes lace at both
    "NO SIR!" Both yelled
    "Saix and Larxene" Said Xaldin while looking at both Saix and Larxene
    "Oof! Im with the berseeker!" Exclaimed Larxene while waving her head
    "Great, im with the drama queen" Said Saix while sighing
    "Last but not least this leave us both Demyx and Ledanix," Said Xaldin while rising to the air
    "Great, im with the n00b!" Exclaimed Demyx while singing with hes sitar
    "Watch it water boy!" Said Ledanix while pointing hes sword to Demyx
    "Watch it fire breath!" Yelled Demyx while touching hes sitar
    "Atleast I don't have fish breath!" Exclaimed Ledanix while pointing Demyx
    "Ooh!" Shouted everyone
    "Ledanix and Demyx! Behave both!" Yelled Xaldin while pointing hes weapon to both
    "Ok everyone leave to Hollow Bastion now to start the mission!" Exclaimed Xaldi while leaving the room.

    Everyone leaves mad because they had to team up with the person they each hated. They all finally arrived to Hollow Bastion and began to search for heartless to kill.
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    Chapter 1:
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    At Hollow Bastion, the six emebers begin to dialogue...
    "Brr, I have never though we see the ligh of Hollow Bastion again," Said Saix while looking at the place
    "Thats becaues you never think!" Exclaimed Larxene while waving her head
    "Ooh!" Everyone Exclaimed
    "Atleast I don't have disbalanced hips!" Exclaimed Saix while looking at Larxene's hips
    "Ooh! That was serving!" Everyone exclaimed
    "SILENCE!" Yelled a mysterious voice
    "Your mission is to kill heartless!" Exclaimed the mysterious voice
    "Who is it?" Asked Luxord while looking around him
    "Its me! Xaldin!" Exclaimed Xaldin
    "You shall kill heartless until I say so!" Exclaime Xaldin

    Everyone went into different path to kill heartless. Saix and Larxene, whom were fighting like rabid dogs, were in the Town's Shop District, Xigbar and Luxord, whom were joking with no end, were in the Borough and Demyx and Ledanix, whom were talking with no stop, were in the Bailey. Demyx and Ledanix were begining to get along pretty well. They finally found a heartless, a hadow it was, they killed it, then many more apperead...

    "This is foolish!" Exclaimed Demyx while killing heartless
    "This is only an exercise for us to do!" Exclaimed Ledanix while killing heartless
    "An exercise?" Asked Demyx while killing heartless
    "Yes, Xaldin told me that he will do an exercise for us to gain trust to eachother," Replied Ledanix while killing heartless
    "Not a bad idea, were finally getting along!" Exclaimed Demyx while shooting water bullets from hes sitar
    "It doesn't work with everyone!" Exclaimed Ledanix while shooting fire from hes sword
    "Indeed, Saix and Larxene don't get along," Replied Demyx while summoning water clones
    "Well, Saix is empty and Larxene is sarkastic, its what you expect," Replied Ledanix while summoning shadow clones
    "Thats what you get when you mix negative with positive!" Exclaimed Demyx while killing heartless
    "This is getting boring!" Exclaimed Ledanix while using hes shield

    At that same moement a mysterious force was felt...

    "ENOUGH!" Exclaimed a mysterious voice
    "The battling is over!" Exclaimed the voice

    Everyone telesported back to Nothing's Meeting. It was a shock! Saix was all wrecked and Larxene was all ruined...

    "What ahppened you two?" Asked Xaldin while sitting in hes chair
    "A hoard of heartless attacked us," Replied Larxene while hidding her face
    "Are you sure it wasn't my weapon?" Asked Saix while showing hes weapon
    "What happened you two?" Asked Xaldin while ascending to the air
    "We...begun to fight eachother," Replied Saix while openong a portal
    "YOU ARE NOT RETREITING! SAIX!" Yelled Xaldin while summoning hes weapons
    "You have dared to attack an organization member?" Asked Xaldin while poitining hes lance to Saix and Larxene
    "Yes we did!" xclaimed Larxene while pointing her weapon to xaldin
    "Menacing a superior is against the organization policy! Larxene!" Yelled Xaldin while pointing hes weapon

    The three were in a stance that could finish themslefes at any time...

    "Stop this nonsense!" Yelled Ledanix while pointng hes sword to Xaldin
    "DO NOT POINT ME WITH THAT!" Yelled Xaldin while poitinting hes lance to Ledanix
    "Then stop you!" Exclaimed Ledanix while pointing hes weapon
    "I AM THE SUPERIOR! RESPECT ME!" Yelled Xaldin while pointing hes lance
    "Superior smackity!!!!" Yelled Ledanix while raising hes sword to slash Xaldin

    Everyone stayed pause, Ledanix raised hes sword and, SWOOSH! He hited Xaldin. Xaldn was badly hurt!...

    "Now whos the superior! I AM!" Yelled Ledanix while ascending to the air
    "I am now NEW Organization XIII's Superior!" Exclaimed Ledanix while summoning a lot of Dragoon Nobodies

    Everyone was paused, Xaldin was still hurtt and Saix and Larxene were stil wrecked. Ledanix ordered the nobodies to lift Xaldin to the air...

    "Hello Xaldin!" Exclaimed Ledanix while poiting hes weapon to Xaldin
    "You are the new superior!" Exclaimed Xaldin while sufering

    Xaldin falls to the ground and Ledanix descends to hes throne...

    Let the new Administration of NEW Organization XIII begin!

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    Chapter 2a:
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    In Nothing's Meeting, Ledanix and the other members are dialoguing...
    "Now then organization, we are in need of new members!" Exclaimed Ledanix while waving hes sword
    "We should travel from world to world searching for nobodys," Replied Xigbar while poolishing hes sniper
    "Indeed, your next assigment will be to go to gather more nobodys...in group!" Exclaimed Ledanix while rising to the air
    "Where shall we go?" Asked Larxene while crossing her legs
    "You shall all go to... different worlds!" Exclaimed Ledanix while opening portals
    "Each one of you gets a world," Said Ledanix while poiting everyone
    "Xigbar and Luxord, you get Port Royal!" Exclaimed Ledanix while opening the portal to Port Royal
    "Ok!" Exclaimed both
    Xigbar and Luxord entered the portal
    "Larxene and Saix...I wanna see the both of ya alive!" Exclaimed Ledanix while opening a portal
    "You will... Pride Lands!" Exclaimed Ledanix while opening the protal
    "Yes sir," both said
    Larxene and Saix entered the portal
    "What do I do sir?" Asked Demyx while singing with hes sitar
    "You will go with Xaldin," Replied Ledanix while sitting on hes throne
    At that same moment, Xaldin woke up...
    "Agh! Urgh! What happened?" Asked Xaldin while standing up
    "You had the beating of your life," Replied Demyx while standing up
    "You two will go to... here in the castle to gather nobodys!" Exclaaimed Ledanix while opening a portal
    "Sir, yes, sir!" Exclaimed both
    Both entered the portal
    Meanwhile,in Port Royal...
    Luxord and Xigbar are walking. They then find a teenaged boy with a eye cape, an earring, a scar in hes eye, a sword, a pirate head and a tatoo in hes arm...
    "Hello there mate! May I asked if you are a nobody?" Exclaimed and asked Xigbar while crossing hes fingers
    "Yes, yes I am!" Exclaimed the boy while waving hes sword
    "Whats your name?" Asked Luxord while gambling hes cards
    "Im Etixrap!" Exclaimed Etixrap while waving hes sword
    "Were here in name of NEW Organization XIII!" Exclaimed Xigbar while raising hes hands
    "Its a group that dedicates to find a way to get a heart and recover to fully exist!" Exclaimed Luxord while throwing cards at the air
    "So your here to ask me if I wnat to join?" Asked Etixrap while scratching hes head
    "Yes, wanna join?" Asked Xigbar while crossing hes fingers for hope
    "Sure!" Exclaimed Etixrap while jumping
    "Yahoo!" Exclaimed Xigbar and Luxord
    Both opened a portal and led Etixrap to the portal... They found themsleves at Nothing's Meeting...
    "Sir were back!" Exclaimed Luxord while sitting on hes throne
    A portal opened and Ledanix came from it...
    "Ah, yes, a new member! Welcome, welcome!" Exclaimed Ledanix while sitting in hes throne
    "What do I do sir?" Asked Etixrap while sitting
    "Oh, nothing, since your new you have to be familiarized with the organization's goal," Replied Ledanix while opening a book
    "Ok, we, NEW Organization XIII dedicate to fight heartless and let the hearts they devoured run away into Kingdom Hearts to gain a heart and fully exist," Said Ledanix while closing the book
    "Soo, when do I get the cool cloak?" Asked Etixrap while crossing hes legs
    "Hahaha!" Laughted Ledanix while opening a portal
    "Whats so funny?" Asked Etixrap while waving hes sword
    "No nothing," Replied Ledanix while from the portal, grabing a cloak
    "Here," Said Ledanix while handing Etixrap the cloak
    Etixrap puts it on and feels more contfy...
    "This is great! Whats my first assigment?" Asked Etixrap while wondering
    "Your first assigment is to...get me milk and cookies!" Giggled and exclaimed Ledanix while trying to resist laughter
    Both Luxord and Xigbar try to resist the laughting...
    "WHAT?!" Asked and exclaimed Etixrap while opening hes mouth down like a cartoon
    "Well you asked and I couln't resist! And I told you that new members don't get assigments until their second day in the organization!" Replied Ledanix while controling hes laughter
    "Now get me my milk and cookies...lol! Exclaimed Ledanix while laughting
    "Ok!" Exclaimed Etixrap while dissapearing
    "Lol! Way to greet the new member Leda!" Exclaimed Xigbar while laughting
    "Rofl! Yes, he opened hes motuh like he saw a nude women!" Exclaimed Luxord while drooling over hes cloak
    "Hahaha!" Exclaimed Ledanix while laughting
    Etixrap came back...
    "Here ya go sir," Said Etixrap while handing the milk and cookies
    "Thanks, MUNCH! Wait these arent' chocolate chip... THERE NOBODY POOP! Exclaimed Ledanix while spiting everything

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    As Larxene and Saix walked throught the Pride Lands, they encountered some starnge boy without a shirt, had some wrecked pants, an earing, a scar and short blonde hair...

    "Hello there... strangers!" Exclaimed the lad while jumping
    "May I ask if you're a nobody?" Asked Saix while fixing hes hair
    "Isn't it obvious?" Replied Larxene while putting her hand in her face
    "Did I asked you?" Asked Saix while approaching to her
    "Um...no?" Replied Larxene while summoning her weapons
    "Woah! Didn't had to get those! Exclaimed Saix while summoning hes weapon

    The two began fighting. A portal opened and a hand came out. It began waving at the lad to come in. The lad entered the portal. Larxene and Saix were still fighting. They didn't noticed that the lad dissaperead. As they kept fighting, Ledanix came out from the portal and raised hes sword...

    "You two will never stop, eh?" Asked Ledanix while raising hes sword
    "Wh-wh-what?!" Exclaimed both
    "This is the end of your struggle!" Exclaimed Ledanix while waving hes sword in the air

    Ledanix slashed hes sword to both and they began to slowly dissapear. Only the remnants of them were left. They were slowly swpt away by the wind.Ledanix opened a portal and he entered it.

    He then appered in Nothing's Meeting seing the new member with hes cloak and with Etixrap with a "im sorry" hat with him...

    "Hy... boss! im really sorry!" Said Etixrap While putting the hat
    "No problem," Replied Ledanix while walking to hes chair.
    "Whats wron Leda?" Asked both Xigbar and Luxord
    "Get me the NEW Organization XIII list," Replied Ledanix while sitting in hes chair
    "Here you go sir," Replied Xigbar while giving him the list

    Ledanix grabbed the list and with hes finger, a magical fire apperead and erased Saix and Larxene from it. He gave the list back to Xigbar and then he hide it...

    "What happened to Larxene and Saix sir?" Asked Luxord while approaching to Ledanix
    "Lets just say they "reserved their tombs"," Replied Ledanix while opening a portal
    "Where ya going sir?" Asked Etixrap while approaching to him
    "I have some "matters" to attend," Replied Ledanix while entering the portal
    "Is he always like that?" Asked both Etixrap and Uxag, whom was the new guy
    "No, hes not," Replied Luxord while sitting in hes chair
    "We have to leave him alone," Said Xigbar while sitting in hes chair

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    In The Castle That Never Was, near the roof where Kingdom Hearts once shined, we see Demyx and Xaldin looking for some Nobodies...

    "Demyx," Said Xaldin while looking around him

    "Yes?"

    "We're wasting our time," Xaldin Said "Don't you think we're being distracted?"

    "Umm... No? And it's the first time I hear the word think,"

    "Like that isn't notisable,"

    "You said something?"

    No, no! Nothing,"

    As they kept searching and searching, they suddenly run toward a Nobody...

    "There's one!" Exclaimed Xaldin while running toward it

    Just as he was to catch it, the Nobody jumped and Xaldin stopped. When he looked down he saw an enormous ball of Nobodies...

    "D-D-D-D-DEMYX!!!!!!!!" Xaldin's screamed was heard from all the roof

    "WH-WHAT IS IT!?"

    "L-L-L-L-L-LOOK DOWN!!!!!!" Exclaimed xaldin while pointing down

    Demyx gazed he's eyes upon the big ball and saw how they devoured the castle.

    "WE HAVE TO TELL LEDANIX!" Exclaimed DEmyx while opening a portal

    "LET'S GO!!!" Said Xaldin

    As they left, a shadow emerged from the roof's floor. A white and black cloak was seen getting hit by the wind and shining red sabers were seen at hand and yellow eyes were seen looking fearcely...

    "It's been a while... My dear castle!"

    "Mwuhahahahahaha!"

    BACK WITH DEMYX AND XALDIN...

    Demyx and Xaldin arrived at Nothing's Meeting where everyone were dialoguing...

    "WHERE'S LEDANIX?!" Asked Xaldin while looking around him

    "CALM DOWN! He is in his room," Luxord said

    "OK! THANKS!!" Said Xaldin and at the same time bolted with Demyx

    After they left, the room began to get dark and Dusks began to emerge from the floor...

    "What's happening?" Said Etixwrap while walking back

    "Memories come to life!" Echoed a voice

    "Huh? That voice! It can't be! It's-"

    Before Luxord could pronounce the name, he was devoured by a Nobody in the floor. Suddenly, a black and white liquid with two shining dots in it began to arise and it took a familiar form...

    "It's been a while... Old friends!" Said the being while waling toward them

    "No, no, noooooooo!!!"

    BACK TO XALDIN AND DEMYX...

    "SIR! WE NEED YOU TO GO TO THE ROOF!" Exclaimed Demyx while grabbing Ledanix by the arm

    "UNHANDME! What for?"

    "There seems to be a distortion on the roof!" Said Xaldin while opening a portal

    "Hmm! Stay where you are!" Said Ledanix

    "Wh-What for?" Xaldin asked

    Suddenly, fom the portal came out a hoard of Dusk and ambushed Xaldin and Demyx. The Dusk after devouring Xaldin and Demyx, they began to form them. They were Xaldin and Demyx alright, but their appereance was exactly like a Dusk...

    "WH-WHAT'S HAPPENING?!" Exclaimed Ledanix while walking back

    "It's all according to plan!" Echoed a voice

    "Hmm! It can't be him," Said Ledanix

    Suddenly, the dark winds began to cirlce in motion and maked appereance to... The Superior!

    "Hahahahahahahahahha!"

    "So, you are the "runt" behind the organization orders?" Said the Superior while approaching Ledanix

    "Ye- Yes!" Ledanix Exclaimed

    "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!"

    "You killed two members and now you lose all of them to me!" Said Xemnas

    "You won't win me over!"

    "HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!"

    "But it's not you that I want!"

    "Then what do you want?"

    "I want your body!"

    "WHAT?!"

    "Yes! This one is degrading, so I need a new host,"

    "Wait, that sounded like you aren't Xemnas, but someone else,"

    "HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHA!"

    "Who are you?"

    "I AM-"

    Just as he was to say he's name, a rose was sticked at his back and got through his chest...

    "Hmm, no need to hide in that body... Guardian," Said a man hooded in balck with rose petals floating among him

    "Wh-Who are you people?" Asked Ledanix

    "I am Marluxia, The Shadowed Petal," Replied the man in black hood

    "This is Guardian, the source of power of Xehanort's Heartless,"

    "Wait, WHAT?'

    -TO BE CONTINUED-
     
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    LOL! "At least I don't have fish-breath!"
     
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    Even more LOL! Ledanix's rein of terror and swords begins... *Insert dramatic music here*
     
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    that was funny nice story and humor makes it even better!
     
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    IT ISN'T CHOCOLATE CHIP!?!?!? :shocked: HOLY CRAP!! OMG! *Dies of shock*
    Nice chapter!
     
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    Great as usual! This is really funny... Would I be right in guessing Larxene and Saix will end up killing each other? XP
     
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    Actually, if you readed chapter 2b, it says that Ledanix killed Saix and Larxene and he erased their names from the list, the next will be what happened to Xaldin and Demyx?
     
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    FINALLY!
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    Prepare yourself for the BOOMS and the CRASH!
    Because "Superior" is back!

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    Some punctuation would be good, but as for the rest, the story is nice and humouristic!