The ones you love Can't be brought back Once they decide It's over I'm trapped Tangled in a web of misery There's no way out No way to be free My shattered heart Lies on the ground My blood strewn Across the floor We were in love Once before Was that a lie? Did you decieve me? I can feel no more love I can feel no more pain It's time for me to move on You're not worth my time Just a quick little poem to vent out feelings a bit... It's not very good, since I hardly edited, but CnC plz? :3
Its a good way to do so Destiny...I hope you are able to cheer up soon....*hugs*....perhaps this song will help...yes it is techno but it has a good meaning behind it...http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R2eY0VrS-cU....
Don't worry, it's not bad. I like poems like this, that are just randomly written out because they need to be, and not all spruced up or anything. And I can kindof relate to this poem. So I like it ^^
...Honestly, that's pretty much how I feel right now, so as far as I can tell, nothing seems wrong with it, at least flow-wise. I don't know, maybe a word or two should be substituted, but I can't think of any right now. Sorry. Hope you feel better soon.
Thanks, guys... *hugs all* :) I'm glad you guys like it, despite how fast I wrote it... I just reread it, and actually scared myself... lol XD I may do some editing on it later, since it bugs me when I don't like something on one of my poems... XP
