OOC: This is a fanfic I'm currently making. I'm not sure if others would like it. If you see anything that looks the same from a fanfic you made, I'm sorry. I haven't yet read anybody else's fanfics. New Character: Hiroku (Unknown character) Preview of second part of the story: Thousands of Heartless charged down the deserted area, with nothing else to see except the mountains, and the ground that was just covered with dirt, while a group of people stood their grounds, waiting for the attack. A blond boy with a red, black, and white suit stood there, gripping on a blade in a shape of a key, glarring down at the incoming Heartless, "is there no.... end to them?." His white haired friend, yellow and black clothing, stood next to him, "I'm sure there is... Roxas, but we have no choice, they already taken over some of the worlds." He look over to a girl who had long red hair, wearing pink and had a small skirt, "Kairi, be careful." "Don't worry Riku, I'll be able to handle some myself," she said seriously while looking to the others, Leon, Yuffie, Cloud, Tifa, King Mickey, Donald, Goofy, and Hiroku, "even though there's only a few of us.... I'm sure we can handle them." "Let's hope so," Hiroku said who had silver and blue long hair that went down his back. He was wearing black, blue, and white robes. They watched as the Heartless charges towards them, "be on your guards." Everyone took out their weapons, excluding Roxas, who already had out his keyblade. "Let's go!," Roxas yelled as the group charged and start fighting the attacking Heartless. Everyone was putting their best as they try to fight every Heartless that came at them. The Heartless was stronger then ever before. It wasn't very long that few gotten tired. The skies grew dark, and the group knew, sooner or later, the world will be completely filled with darkness, just like all the worlds will be if they fail......... The darkness..... Is growing.... Roxas destroyed a Heartless that was aiming at King Mickey.... The balance..... Is breaking..... Donald used Thunder to defeat the surrounding Heartless near Goofy.... The light........ Riku turns around to see a Heartless behind Kairi about to strike, "KAIRI!!!" .... IS NEEDED!! A flash of bright light filled the area as everyone covered their eyes so the light wouldn't blind them. After some of the light faded, Kairi took her hand down from her eyes and turned around to see a person in a bright white robe, as light flowed out of his suit. The hood of the robe covered the person's face as he turned around and face the charging Heartless. Everyone also watched and was speechless. The person held out his covered arm towards the coming Heartless, as a big white light appeared and start to take form..... of a pure white keyblade. "A..... K-Keyblade!?," Roxas yelled, wide eyed and confused. The person didn't replied as he swung his keyblade at the enemy. Which he didn't touched them with, but a bright light came from it and somehow wiped tons of Heartless clean and disappeared with hundreds of hearts, floating to the air. More Heartless was charging and the person was about to strike again... "Heartless, retreat!," a voice yelled as all the Heartless disappeared. It was all quiet throughout the area and the sky began to become bright blue again. "Hey! Who are you?!," Roxas asked the mysterious man as it turned around towards them. "I....... don't know," the person simply said as he disappeared, leaving no trail. "Who is he?," Roxas asked himself as everyone turned to each other as the answer remained unknown..... *End of Preview*
00C: Now here's the story. Prologue: The legendary Secret Disclaimer: I don't own anything ___________________________________________ Dark...Light...They shall be balanced to keep the peace of the worlds... Even so, the darkness will always lurk and seek ways to destroy the light... Thus, the light has it's own powers, the powers that is within those with strong hearts... Because of these hearts, they created Kingdom Hearts... Whoever uses Kingdom Hearts, will be the strongest of them all... But this power can't be just given to anyone... The one who gains the power cannot use it to destroy the balance... But bring it back to the state that doesn't cause destruction... Kingdom Hearts will give it's power to only one who has the strongest of all the hearts of the worlds... Thus in doing so, the one will lose memories of those he hate and love... And gain full power of the light... Seek only to complete his destiny... To keep peace and balance throughout the galaxy... No Enemies... No Allies... OOC: Sorry if it isn't detailed enough.... I'm still learning about making stories. Chapter 1: New Mission OOC: I won't be telling who is the couples in the story... So if you get far in the story and found out you don't like the couples, don't go telling me to change it. Also, this will contain spoilers since this is suppose to be after Kingdom Hearts 2. Enjoy the first chapter of this story. Disclaimer: I don't own anything. __________________________________________________ __________ "Hey Riku... what do you think it was the door to the light?," Sora asked to Riku. They were back at Destiny Islands after defeating Xehanort's Nobody. Sora and Riku spend most of their time watching the sunset. Riku was sitting on a tree that was bent in a "S" or "Z" shape, however you looked at it. Sora was currently leaning on the tree. Riku jumped off while Sora moved away from the tree. "This," Riku answered as he point to Sora's heart. "This?," Sora asked as he put his hand on his heart. "Yeah. It's always closer than you think," Riku said and in return, Sora smiled. "Sora! Riku!," Sora and Riku turns to see Kairi running towards them. Soon Kairi stopped in front of them. "Hey, what's up?," Sora asked as Kairi tries to catch her breath. When she finally did she held out a bottle with a message, "look". Sora instantly noticed the King Mickey's print, "from the king?." Sora grabs the bottle and takes out the message to open it. Riku and Kairi walked closer to look. Sora, Riku, there is something I want you two to look into. I can't really explain but it's important for you two know. More people have been gone missing and I believe that the Heartless and Malefacent is the ones responsible. What I need you two to do is to check other worlds to see where the Heartless are coming so that we can track where Malefacent's lair is hidden. Donald and Goofy are already searching so you'll have to find them if you need their help. Cid has already agreed to send you the gummi ship. Whenever your ready, just take out your Keyblade. And Kairi, I would like you to stay at the Islands. This mission would be to dangerous, and if you stay at the Islands, you can look over to see if any heartless appears and stop them. "Well. Ready for another adventure, Sora?," Riku said as he turned his glance from the message to Sora. "Of course!," Sora replied while they looked over to Kairi. "I know. I'll stay here," Kairi said with a smile. "We'll come back! I promise Kairi, and Namine," Sora said as Roxas and Namine came out, ghostly like. "You make to many promises, Sora," Roxas said when he looked over to Sora before to Namine and Kairi, "but I'm sure we will come back." "Be careful Roxas, Sora, Riku. We'll look out for any Heartless if any appears," Namine said. "Well. I guess it's time to go, see you two later!," Sora said as Roxas entered back in Sora while Namine did the same. Sora turns around to face Riku, "lets go." "Yeah," Riku said as Sora took out his keyblade. The Keyblade started to shine as the gummi ship came out from the sky and landed onto the ground. The two ran towards the ship. "Sora! Riku! Wait!," Kairi yelled as she ran up to them. "What is it, Kai-," Sora got caught off when Kairi hugged both of them. "Don't worry, Kairi, we will be back," Riku said as Kairi released the two from her hug. "I know. But every time you two leave, I'm always stuck on the Island!," Kairi said with a upset look. "You might be able to come with us the next mission," Sora said as Kairi giggled with a smile. "I don't think so Sora," Kairi said as she backed off. Sora and Riku got into the gummi ship. Before take off, Kairi waved to them while they waved back. Soon, they already left the Destiny Islands and out of the world. Sora just starred out the window while Riku had the controls, "don't tell me your worring about it too." "We only stayed for a little while. I was hoping that we would stay longer," Sora said as he looked away from the window to Riku. "So did I, but you know we can't really disobey the king," Riku said as he continued to drive the gummi ship, not taking his eyes off the screens. Sora nodded before looking back out the window, "I know. Hey, where's Chip and Dale? Shouldn't they be in the gummi ship as well?." "Seems like the gummi ship came to our world on automatic or by magic," Riku said before he added on, "most likely magic because the ship would be gone with all these meteors." Riku took a quick glance over to Sora, "cheer up Sora, it's not really like you if you just stand there with a frown on your face." "Well. I guess we can always come back, right?," Sora asked with a smile and turned around to see Riku. "Right, but first, let's get this mission done," Riku said with a grin. "Okay, so were are we headed?," Sora asked as he walked over before sitting down at a seat. "To Radiant Garden, we might get more information there," "So we might see Leon and the others! Well, hurry up!," Sora said excitedly. Riku laughed lightly, "Sure thing". Chapter 2: Radiant Garden Disclaimer: I don't own anything __________________________________________________ ________ "Here we are," Riku said as Sora looked out the window to see Radient Garden's world. "Looks like nothings changed since we defeated Xehanort's Nobody," Sora said with a big grin. "That's good to hear, but that doesn't mean we can't be careful," Riku said in a low tone, "I'm going to land so get seated." Sora quickly got to his seat and buckled up tight before they headed down to Radiant Garden. Sora was amazed how nice and easy Riku landed the gummi ship onto the ground. "Hey, how did you land that easily?," Sora asked as they both unbuckled. "Guess it's beginners luck, now come on, lets go to Merlin's house," Riku said as they got out of the gummi ship and started to head down the street. "Ahhh!! Don't hurt me!! Look! I'll give you as many equipments as you want!," a voice yelled as Sora and Riku stopped and head towards the yell. They found themselves in front of a merchant with shadow Heartless that was nearing on him. Sora and Riku quickly took out their weapons and attacked all the Heartless until they were gone. "Hey, are you okay?," Sora asked the merchant man while the man got himself up. "Yes, thank you for saving me. I'll give you a reward for saving me!," the merchant man got out a small bag and was about to give it to Sora and Riku, but Riku pushed the bag away. "Thanks, but no reward is needed, just be careful next time." "Oh, but there's got to be a way to repay you... I know! Take these!," The merchant man takes out two scarfs and handed to Sora and Riku quickly, "please take these, and come by to my shop any time you want any equipments!." Before Sora and Riku could say anything, the merchant man left. "What's up with him? And why are there more Heartless?," Sora asked as he looked up from the scarf to Riku. "Who knows. But we should get going," Riku puts his scarf away. "Right!," Sora said as he does the same thing and continued on. It didn't take long to get to Merlins house as Sora opened the door and they walked in. "Well. It's the hero's that defeated Xehanort," Leon said with a small smile. Yuffie and Merlin was also there and Sora looked around. "Hi Leon. Where's Cid and Aerith?," Sora asked. "They're in Transverse Town. We've been trying to stop the Heartless from growing and since Transverse Town is a place where lots of people hang out, we believe that Heartless will want to go there," Yuffie answered. "And it turns out that we were right. It's a good thing you two are here, you can help us get rid of most of the Heartless here," Leon continued. "What happened to the town's security system? We just helped a guy being chased by some Heartless," Sora asked as Leon frowned. "By the time that the Heartless appeared, we have been fighting them while using the security system. We thought it wasn't working, but then we realized that it was already handling more Heartless somewhere else," "So, guess you want us help to take down more Heartless so that the system will be able to take them on it's own," Riku said with a nod from Yuffie. "That would be great, we might as well start now," Yuffie said with a grin. "Wait, do you know where the King, Donald, and Goofy are?," Sora asked. "Sorry, we haven't seen them," Leon said as Sora sighed and slightly frowned, "but I'm sure you'll find them." "Before you go, my boy, I'll give you a powerful magic spell. But this will also take away all the magic abilities you already have but it's worth it," Merlin said as he used a spell so Sora could learn it, "it's powerful, but don't think of using it in here, I already cleaned up the mess Yuffie made." "Okay, let's go get those Heartless," Sora said as the four left Merlin and went out the door, just to see Heartless around outside, "woah!." "Sora, why don't you try doing that Magic spell on these Heartless," Riku said. "Okay then! Pyro Storm!," Sora yelled as fire shrounded him and went off in different directions, defeating all the Heartless around, "cool!." "Why can't Merlin teach us anything like that?," Yuffie asked, pouting. "Because you don't know how to use magic, and if you do, you'll destroy Merlin's house," Leon said as Sora laughed. "I'm sure there's more Heartless around, lets split up," Riku said as they all agreed and split up in pairs. Leon and Yuffie went to check out the town square while Sora and Riku checks out Ansem's old hideout. Sora and Riku have been fighting all the way till they got to Ansem's office, which was still a mess. "Never thought I would miss DiZ- I mean, Ansem," Riku said while the two looked around the room. Sora walked over to look at Xehanort's picture, "yeah. But not Xehanort... Because of him..." "Well. Just think of it this way, if Xehanort's Heartless and Nobody haven't been messing around, we would never go to other worlds. We might never even meet all of our friends we got now," Riku said as he went up to Sora, "he's gone now Sora, so don't hold a grudge." "Yeah, your right there, lets go-," right when Sora finished soldier and shadow type Heartless appeared from the ground and Sora took out his keyblade, "there's more?!" "Guess so," Riku said before the two start fighting the Heartless within the room until all the Heartless was defeated or retreated. "I see that you defeated all the Heartless here," Sora and Riku turned to see Merlin, "but it seems like the Heartless become stronger than they usually were. I shall help you by giving you new clothes, they still have the same abilities before, but also with new powers." Merlin then used his magic to change Sora's clothes. They were like his older ones, but the white and black colors switched and had different designs. "I liked Sora's old clothes better...," Riku said as he puts away his "Way to the Dawn" sword. "Well now, these clothes have more power and will be very useful," Merlin said. "Yeah, but will I still have my forms?," Sora asked as he look down at his new clothes. "Yes and no, you still got your Valor form, but all the other forms you will gain later on." "Figures...," Sora said with a sigh. "But that Valor form is different. All it's power becomes fire type, very useful when handling quite a handful of Heartless. Not only that but you can't get harm by any fire attacks." "Great! Thanks Merlin," Sora said before turning to face Riku, "lets see how Leon and Yuffie are doing." Riku nodded before the two left Merlin behind, who vanished, leaving the room in silence. Not so long Sora and Riku found Leon and Yuffie fighting the Heartless before the security system defeated the last group of the Heartless. "Looks like we got rid of the Heartless enough so the system can take control again," Leon said as he glanced between Sora and Riku, "thanks." "It was no problem!," Sora said with a grin. "We better go and look for the King," "And Donald and Goofy," Sora finished Riku's sentence. "Okay then, we'll tell you if we see them," Yuffie smiled. "That will be great!," Sora said before he and Riku headed for the gummi ship.
Yay! This post gets me 100 posts, and I'm first to reply! But anyway, this is a very good story. I liked that new character you introduced, Hiroku. It's very well thought out, but there are some grammar/ capitalization problems you may wanna work on. But still, Rock on, TLH! (The Lost Heart) Even Kirby Likes it! <(^-^)>"Good story!" Hey, and I did something good for the story: I told a friend about it!
*reads preview* Uuuuuh, epic!!! *reads actual chapters* Nice work!!! And 2nd to reply!!! (and it's my 90th post, I'm not too far behind you Rinoa *smiles slyly*)
Not bad at all...be sure to proofread and fix gramatical errors, I noticed quite a few. Also, I noticed you said "you" in the story. You should try to keep it in 3rd person view. Be sure to add a little more detail, some of the descriptions lack depth. But now that I'm done bashing your work, allow me to say that I go into that depth because I believe you have potential and the tips will help you become a better writer =). Good job on the first chapters. You're on your way. Check out my fanfic? (Link in siggy).
This is a good story, but it does has some mistakes in grammar. But overall, it was fun to read, and i was actually clustered by the story!
Ahh... of course. I guess I'll have to agree with that, cuz neither could I! You just tell it so flat out, description is good, but, uh, work on the grammar! Have we been abandoned?
I honestly think we have been abandoned. I've checked back here for like 30 years now and nothing! I want the totally amazing story to continue!
