I honestly don't know where this came from, since I've never written any kind of poetry except when I'm in a state of emotional stress, good stress or otherwise. If anyone saw Dear Daisy when I posted it, that was also written straight from emotion. This one is actually written to the tune of a song or maybe even a couple mixed together, but I can't put my finger on it. Anyway, do your worst I suppose. Since I wrote it straight from my head with no real structure set out there's bound to be something not good about it, but I like it all the same. I wouldn't change it for the world, but I still want opinions. The Faceless Girl Year one and I see your name Year two now we're all but best friends Year three and I'm fallin' in love With you Now I don't know what to do I see your name realize I've never known you as much As I do now Looking at your picture today I never thought it could go this way To think only two years ago You were the faceless girl
It's awesome, it really makes the reader feel something. I can honestly tell all of the emotion that you've put into this. I like the story of it too, that's really sweet. <3
Thanks, both of you. I honestly expected criticism right off the bat, but I suppose it's not as bad as how I thought others would find it. It's really weird what you become capable of when you might be in love, eh?