Sunrise

You know, most of the stuff on here isn't very good, but this was an engaging read. There were a few times were I was annoyed by the use of some grammar and misspelling but it was barely a nuisance. The whole story was really nice, and short, too. Good job Rosey.

 

Cute little story, made me laugh. There are a few spelling errors but they didn't make much of a difference.

I kinda wanna know why Namine didn't want to draw, about the time she messed up.

 

:P

Kairi dear, you know better then anyone here that I suck at spelling. But because I love you so very much, I went back and edited it for joo. ^^

Dont worry, I fell of the bed when I was invisioning it. *cracks up again* >> << BUT IT LOOKS SO FUNNAH!!!

I know. I would <3 to have a pair of those boxer shorts. It will be my life dream.

>> << I have fans? O.o

Ehhh...my spelling and grammer suck. Hard >.<

And thanks ^^

I think I posted why on the first page >>

Wow, I just quoted 4 people >>

 

Of course you have fans ^_^ being the great writer that you are.

you did??? *goes back to check*

I also just read you other story, it's awsome!

edit: ohhh that's what you were talking about, the CoM thingy. *gets it now*

 

Yay, I have fans *claps*

Thanks. That one is always fun to write.

Glad you get it now! =D

 

I like your story! You're a great writter:)

 

@ Heart: Thanks alot for commenting ^^

 

*is fan* yay ^_^

it's fun to read too ^_^

Do you think you maybe will make a sequil to this? More of namine making little things happen that are funny is...well, funny ^_^

lol, overkill of the ^_^ smilies

 

Im actually making this a three or four part thing by request >>

So Im doing that right now because I have nothing better to do with my life lol.

^_^

You can not over abuse that smily.

 

yayz! ^_^ *waits egerly*

haha, my spelling phails

 

YAY MUCH TO MY SURPRISE THERE IS A PART 2!!! >> (and most likely 3&4)

This actually relates directly to the past one and same with more parts. After I finished that one, I might do other little fun things with Namine >> FUN FUN!!!

Okay now I need to stop having caffinated mints 0.0

Section DOS!!!

It had been a few days since Namine had performed her unspeakable deed. She sat on the beach smiling at the sun, the absolutely beautiful weather, and the best of all was that her two best friends had finally had the never to say what they really felt about each other. The blonde giggled. Not that they didn’t do it with out any help… we all know Sora’s to big of a baby to say anything before… Namine giggled again. Her faithful sketch book and pencils lay to her right. She stared over at her sketchbook, and its blank pages stared back at her. The one special drawing was the first page in her book, and whenever she opened it, she looked at it and smiled.

The petite blonde looked around to make sure no one was coming or watching her from a distance then she carefully picked her drawing out of the sketchbook. She spread her skinny legs out into “V†shape and placed the paper onto the warm sand in front of her. She grinned at the colors and laughed at the details. With her fingernails, she held the drawing up to the sun in front of her and the sun’s rays of light shown through making the colors pop of the page.

A loud pair of footsteps reached her ears. In a panic, Namine quickly shoved the drawing back into the sketchbook, but a little corner was still sticking out, unknown to poor Namine. Kairi and Sora came running up behind her and they both plopped down on the sand beside her.

“Hey Namine! How are you doing!!†The brunette asked.

Namine faked a smile. “I’m doing okay Kairi. How are you and Sora getting along?â€

Kairi’s eyes lit up like the sun. “O every thing is just AMAZING Namine!†She leaned over to whisper in Namine’s ear. “You would not believe what he did to tell me he liked me! It was the cutest thing ever!†Namine felt a little guilt rush into her stomach. “And Namine, let me just tell you, he is the MOST AMAZING kisser!†Namine looked over at friend strangely. She eyed Kairi up and down to see what had hit her in the head. Kairi just smiled eagerly back at her. Kairi went over to Sora and kissed him lightly on the cheek. Sora’s cheeks turned bright red but he managed to look over at Namine and smile happily. Namine looked of at both of them, slightly scared. I know I can mess with his mind, but I didn’t do anything to Kairi… Her eyes widened Maybe I overdid it just a tad… She closed her eyes and winced at the thought of an over lovey-dovey Kairi and Sora. That just might be scarier then Xemnas in a Speedo…

Kairi flounced back over to Namine. She noticed the sketchbook for the first time. “OOOOHH NAMINE!! WHAT ARE YOU DRAWING!!!†She reached down picked up the drawings. Namine clasped her left hand to her mouth and reached for the drawing with the other hand, but missed and flopped into the sand.

“Kairi, please, PLEASE don’t look at that!†Namine was frantic. OMG, OMG, OMG IF SHE SEES THAT DRAWING I’M SO DEAD!!!! She screamed inside her head. “Kairi, please give that back!â€

“Pfft! I just wanted to see your drawings!†Kairi exclaimed happily. She started at the back of the book and moved forward skimming through the pages. Namine watched the colors blur by, just waiting for her to get to the drawing. Her eyes stopped on the first page and hovered there. Namine turned around and buried her face in her palms. Kairi shut her eyes for a little bit and her eyes glazed over. Her voiced trembled “Namine… what’s this?†Her whole body was shaking.

“Nothing…†Namine meeped quietly.

“But…this is the picture of me and Sora…and its just like when we first kissed… exactly like it…and its dated before we kissed.†A small tear rolled down her rosy cheeks. “This is all your doing, isn’t it?†She threw the sketchbook and drawing down to the ground. Her hands were shaking ferociously. “Is this why he kissed me?†She threw a look over at Sora.

He put his hands up in the hair. “I had nothing to do with this, I swear!!â€

“So this is all you Namine!†She spat out at the blonde who was looking more like a scared puppy dog then a teenage girl.

“Kairi, I was just trying to help-“

“YOU DID NOTHING TO HELP!!!†Kairi was furious. “You…You…YOU WITCH!!!!†She ran off crying to the secret cave.

Sora ran after her. “Kairi, wait!!!â€

Namine just sat there trembling on the beach. She curled up in a ball and rocked back and forth. Her long blonde hair fell over her face. She crawled back and grabbed her sketchbook and faked a smile. I think I know how to fix this… She grabbed her paper and a pencil and started to draw.
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Kairi is having some MAJOR PMS.

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CnC!

 

I laughed, and yet felt sad at the same time. Poor, poor Naminé... Kairi was so effed up, OMG. xD Please, continue (but no rush, 'kay? I want it to be just as good as the other two parts.)

 

Whoa.

Whoa.

Whoa.

I didn't think it was possible for Kairi to get that angry. Sora had better stay away from her for awhile, otherwise he might get caught in crossfire. Great part 2!

 

Lol, I already know what happens next >> HAHAHAHAHA << >>

Yes Kairi is mad....

Yes Kairi is very angery... >.<

Thank ya!

 

it would be funny if after kairi called namine a witch namine went all "oh no she didnt!" and then they started cat fighting XD

 

Lol, bish slap fight!

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FUN!!!

 

Aww, I laughed but it's sad too

Xemnas in a Speedo....*shudder* I dunno, something being worse that that? well that's one thing I never EVER want to see. lol

*can't wait till the next one*

 

What I was aiming for ^^

 

lawl so true XD

 

Dude, bish slap fights would be so much fun...

*Laughs as she thinks of a new story in which Namine and Kairi Bish slap each other*