Note:This is a not going to be a full-fledged story,it will be based on humor and Sora is going to mysteriously end up in the worlds of the video games I play other than KH,So you won't be expecting Halo or Call of Duty Chapter 1"Where it all begins" Sora:Ok so I'm Sora and I'm gonna narrate my "travels to strange worlds via strange blackholes". World 1"Haven city" Sora:Here I end up in some futuristic city struck with war with long-eared guys in blue armor with guns fighting red robots and vicious creatures with yellow gems on them. Sora:I say"Where am I"and some dude with yellow green hair,a yellow green goatee,brown armor,an orange creature,and a gun came up to me and said"Who the heck are you"and pointed his gun at me. Sora:Then I said"Put that gun away before I get my keyblade"then the orange creature said"Whats a keyblade"then I say"A mystical weapon of light or darkness that contains amazing power". Riku:Do you expect me to believe that small orange things can talk? Sora:This is true so get onto another thread before I get Sephiroth! Sora:So the guy asked"Where can I get one"but before I could tell him,swarms of those red robots surrounded us and I drew out my keyblade. Riku:Red robots,well then what happened? Sora:The guy then transformed into some monster version of himself with fuzzed out white hair,white skin,black claws,goat like horns,and pitch-black eyes.He also had purplish pink electricity around him. Riku:And I suppose he scared the living crud outta ya,right? Sora:Well he smashed the robots without mercy and appeared to not have any control over this form.Then I say"Are you on steroids or something"then the orange creature said"When Jak here gets ticked,he turns into this because he got Dark Eco injected into him". Riku:I'm deciding steroids than that Dark whatever thing your making up. Sora:I'm speaking the FREAKIN' TRUTH Riku! Chapter 2 coming soon!
Okay . . . i'm sorry but this is . . . a nightmare. I mean don't get me wrong it is a great story plot and I love that Sora is in Jak's world ^_^ but your formatting is . . . off. Look, when you said You should have done this, Now, just to let you know this is more of a play style story. I don't really see many here in the creativity corner (not that I care) and I actually would like to see you continue with this style. It suits you, but you need to work on proper etiquette of this style. Your spelling seemed alright so just try to not bundle up your lines. If Sora is talking then it is "Sora:" if Jak is talking then make a new line and "Jak:" and commonly used with this style is *blah blah* <-- inside those stars you can put things like actions for instance. . . . pointed his gun at me. Sora: *got angry* Put that gun away before I get my keyblade! Orange Creature: *confused* What's a keyblade? Well anyway, that is what I think you need to work on. If you don't it will be a bit of an eye sore to look at (like giant blocks of text) the reader will have a hard time trying to understand who is talking if you go like this, he said then I said then he said then I said rather than Sora: Jak: Riku: Kairi: Orange Creature: Well that is all I have to say, keep up the great story plots ^_^
Thanks for the tip Chapter 2"Haven to Veldin" World 2"Planet Veldin" Sora had been in Haven city for about 2 days untill he was sucked into another blackhole.He was transported to some city in a dusty wasteland. Sora:Where am I now? Suddenly a small silver colored robot with green eyes walked up to Sora. Silver robot:Greetings stranger,I am Clank. Sora:"giggles"My name is Sora"in a robot voice to mock Clank"! Clank:Do not make me get Ratchet! Clank went inside Ratchet's garage and made him come outside. Ratchet:Do I have to RHYNO you to death! Suddenly a black portal appeared on the ground and a Darkside formed from it. Ratchet:Not this thing again! Ratchet fired his RHYNO at the giant Heartless but it did nothing. Clank:So much for the most powerful missile launcher in the galaxy. Sora summened his keyblade and took down the Heartless. Sora was going to properly introduce himself but some giant robot came in. ???:My new planet is nearly complete and your planet is the final piece! Ratchet:You won't take my planet Drek! As Sora was ready to fight another blackhole appeared and he was again whisked away to another world. Drek:That was kind of odd. Ratchet:Where were we! Chapter 3 coming soon
