Something i wrote down this...

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  1. Radiusro Gummi Ship Junkie

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    I never wrote something down....but i tried to do one.

    *ahem*


    "Life isn't easy , you choose the path to find...either good or evil. No matter what , but still.....Life isn't easy."


    So whaddya guys think? i suck at this "writing" thing...but i tried. :T
     
  2. ♥ Momo ♥ Traverse Town Homebody

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    Pretty good for a starter. X3 " Life is not just, it's unfair. I don't understand why we have to choose our own paths, separated from others. A life like mine is full of pain.... why should life be so unjust?" .........I have no idea x.x...... I liked your point of view of life :3
     
  3. Radiusro Gummi Ship Junkie

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    Yeah , i was about to leave kh-vids .....because things didn't go well in my life.



    Ya' know what i mean?
     
  4. ♥ Momo ♥ Traverse Town Homebody

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    Yeah, life doesn't go well for me as well.
     
  5. Vexen_Is_God Gummi Ship Junkie

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    Beautiful saying there.

    My life is quite tough as well. Keep your head up.
     
  6. Destiny's Force Mess with the best, lose like the rest...

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    This is a pretty good start. If you were going to make this into a poem, though, I'd suggest inserting some line breaks and such. Kinda like:

    And then maybe flesh it out a bit. It's pretty simple at the core. But the concept is good. :)
     
  7. Aura Goddess

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    It's pretty good for a starter.But like DF said,if you were wanting to make it into a poem,you should have separated it.Over all it was very good.