Someone should edit a poorly written essay for me.

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My one friend tried editing it for me, but she's all "there's nothing wrong with it" and I'm like "what? I wrote it in forty minutes - there's bound to be a million things wrong with it."

I would just love whoever did this for me.

 

How long is it?
And do you mean like proofread it?

 

I can try to edit it... XD worth a shot

 

It's really not long at all. It's not even a page and a half, and plus - it's double spaced. But yeah, I suppose I mean proofread. Like, if there's a misspelled word, say there is. Or if I need to take something out or add something in, simply just say.

I don't really know how this works over the internet, because I wouldn't know how to show that I edited something. >:

 

Well, You could type the essay to someone, then they can edit it in different color. Then You can show that as the editing

 

Ah okay.

Well, email it to someone and they can edit in a different color and email it back.

As for who...
I guess I won't do it.

 

Post it here. If it's interesting/someone can be bothered, it'll get edited.

 

I could try and do it . I'm not busy tonite

 

The prompt was "does my generation have a role in America's future" and I hate the prompt so much that I just threw something together and didn't even really answer the question. But yeah, whoever wants to edit it can do so, as long as you don't make fun of my horrible writing skills. <3

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My generation is the future of America. We play the most important role because we decide how America turns out, as opposed to older generations whom have already had their time to shine. Our future is bright because we’re accepting, we’re optimistic, and we’re patriotic.

As stated in many different articles, my generation is extremely accepting of diverse people. Time has gone by and in most countries, laws have changed. We don’t follow the beliefs of our ancestors and my generation is a perfect example of that. Years ago, if you saw a colored person walking down the street, you would automatically think you were better than them. Nowadays, we don’t have those thoughts. We accept people how they are, no matter what their race, gender, religion, sexual orientation, etcetera is. Everyone is equal in our eyes.

We are also very optimistic, meaning nothing will get us down. Everyone tends to look on the bright side of things, even if it means not thinking of reality. This can help because when something doesn’t go our way, we won’t give up. We keep trying no matter how hard times may get. Just take a second and imagine if everyone stopped what they were doing after failing only once. Our country would be nothing if we didn’t continue trying until we had success. My generation could really be the generation of success, if I’m even able to dub it that.

The most important part of my generation is that we are willing to die for our country. This is important because in the future, there will no doubt be more wars. I’m not praising students for doing this, but some teenagers drop out of school to obtain their GED. This just shows how much protecting our country means to some kids if they’re willing to give up their education and risk their lives to serve the U.S. We’re patriotic – maybe not as patriotic as some generations, but the majority of us have grown up during a war, much like many generations before us. Patriotism can be, and will be, passed on from generation to generation. The future will be extremely supporting of our country.

My generation is lovers of diversity, optimism, and patriotism. We don’t allow things to bother us – we literally fight to the end for our beliefs and that is what will make our generation unique from others. All and all, our role in America’s future is a good one. I honestly believe that the people that I’m growing up with right now will be able to lead our country to the place that it needs to be. We are in good hands.

 

I'll check it out. Red text is my edits/comments

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My generation is the future of America. We play the most important role because we decide how America turns out, as opposed to older generations whom have already had their time to shine. Our future is bright because we’re accepting, we’re optimistic, and we’re patriotic. Try to elaborate a little bit. Remeber Bull Shitting gives you a higher word count

As stated in many different articles, my generation is an extremely accepting of diverse people. Time has gone by and in most countries, laws have changed. We don’t follow the beliefs of our ancestors and my generation is a perfect example of that. Change the wording Years ago, if you saw a colored person walking down the street, you would automatically think you were better than them. Nowadays, we don’t have those thoughts. We accept people how they are, no matter what their race, gender, religion, sexual orientation, etcetera is. Change to "who they are" Everyone is equal in our eyes.

We are also very optimistic, meaning nothing will get us down. Everyone tends to look on the bright side of things, even if it means not thinking of reality. This can help because when something doesn’t go our way, we won’t give up. We keep trying no matter how hard times may get. Just take a second and imagine if everyone stopped what they were doing after failing only once. Our country would be nothing if we didn’t continue trying until we had success. My generation could really be the generation of success, if I’m even able to dub it that.

The most important part of my generation is that we are willing to die for our country. This is important because in the future, there will, no doubt, be more wars. I’m not praising students for doing this, but some teenagers drop out of school to obtain their GED. This just shows how much protecting our country means to some kids if they’re willing to give up their education and risk their lives to serve the U.S. We’re patriotic – maybe not as patriotic as some generations, but the majority of us have grown up during a war, much like many generations before us. Patriotism can be, and will be, passed on from generation to generation. The future will be extremely supporting of our country.

My generation is lovers of diversity, optimism, and patriotism. We don’t allow things to bother us –(change to a ";") we literally fight to the end for our beliefs and that is what will make our generation unique from others. All and all, our role in America’s future is a good one. I honestly believe that the people that I’m growing up with right now will be able to lead our country to the place that it needs to be. We are in good hands.

 

There.... Hope that is okay for you! The editing is in the quote

 

My edits in DeepSkyBlue

 

Try making the opening more interesting. At the moment, it's generic. The opening sets the entire tone of the piece. If the opening is boring, then I'm going to be bored reading your work. If you take the time to make it interesting (via anecdote, metaphor, repetition or first and second person pronouns) then the entire work is far more interesting.