Time It slips through my fingers like sand It swims past me like a bubbling stream I can only watch it fly by I want to hold it In the center of my palm And so I chase after it I pursue it determinedly Like a dog chasing its own reflection But it is a hopeless dream Because when I do grasp it It vanishes Disappears As if it was never there == A short poem I wrote when I was younger...it's not one of my best works again, but it was written during a time I barely had time to do anything. XD
Short length but that doesn't always make a poem bad.....good free verse.....pretty good atmosphere.....fairly good poem I say for being one of your first poems I'm guessing?.....
a very decent poem that i think is super cute with all its metaphors and personificational symbolism! imagery beyond what the simple words say; awesome job!
Please don't necrobump ;-; It makes me die on the inside. But I'll give some CnC anyway, It's a nice poem, I like the use of symbolism. The only part that lost the poem's flow was when you said the dog was chasing it's reflection. I don't think that really sounded as part of the poem.
