sedentary steps ; (poem)

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Sumi, Sep 7, 2011.

  1. Sumi suicidé

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    Please move if this is the wrong area. It's KH related so. ;; Also I know some of the chronology as far as the game goes is whack. It just sounded nice this way. Made for a project with making sedentary activities sound exciting.


    x, a chime at the twist of my fingers
    stairs of mulitcoloured glass
    fade beneath my feet as i sprint upward
    mosaic floor and silence converge
    the lightning-bug-lit tower rumbles
    a whirr between my hands and my blade enters them
    the darkside - heart shaped hole in its chest
    like someone's been playing cookie cutters on refrence sheets
    (again)
    it staggers forward, lazy, raw power
    dragging one enormous arm forth
    sliding left, i dodge it
    a dark pool opens beneath
    i sink in with one last swing of the keyblade
    have i lost?
    across the screen, gold plated letters
    kingdom hearts
     
  2. ♥♦♣♠∟uxord♥♦♣♠ Banned

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    I like it. It has a mystery feeling to it as you have to think about what is happening. Your work is quite unique and I hope you make some more.
     
  3. Technic☆Kitty Hmm

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    This is a really good piece (though you are right, it is in the wrong section and will be moved by a mod) The way you express what happened in your poem is very great. You have a lot of good vocabulary choices (fan of vocab ^_^) You should keep up the great work and I can't wait to hear more from you ^_^