Scarlet skies

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  1. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    ...my third of the night >_> I have no idea where my head is at xDDD



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    Scarlet sky lies overhead
    Tension rising
    As the sun sinks
    Sinks below the horizon
    Below the horizon
    Of this cruel cold place
    This cruel cold place
    That has stolen so much
    Has stolen so much
    That it is a daily fight
    It is a daily fight to survive
    The ones who have been lost
    Their names just dust on the wind
    Nothing more, Nothing less
    Except a memory to the ones who are left

    The night still comes
    And the dawn still follows
    A last sign of normality
    A reminder of the days before
    When this cold cruel place
    Was so much more than what it is now

    Fire burns the land
    Ice melts away
    Melts like the life that once existed
    Water consumes all
    Whilst the Air chokes everything it reaches
    Increasing heat builds higher and higher
    Colours fade away lost forever
    Lost to a world of yellows and browns

    Delicate Misty haze sweeps everything,
    The ones who are left stare at the scarlet sky
    They look at each other in fear
    The same look on each of their faces
    The same thought in all of their minds
    “What have we done?”


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    I have no idea where this piece came from, I think it was whilst writing an essay on how Humans are affecting the planet, it made me think about how the world would be if we carry on destroying it at the rate we are.
     
  2. W7F King's Apprentice

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    Dun have much to say, that I haven't said about your other poems. *Pulls out ginormous Thesaurus* Epic...Epic...Epic... Ah HAH! Short Story, Saga, titanic, astronomical, everything-CtR-says-or-does, legend, narative. . . Hmm, this list is kinda long.
     
  3. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    <333

    :glomp: thanks as always :):)
     
  4. Luka Deafening silence

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    Awesome !!! well but not sas good as your others D: sorry
     
  5. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    lol don't appologise xDDD I didn't think it was as good either ^^

    any tips?
     
  6. Luka Deafening silence

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    I dont know i never wrote such a poem XD
     
  7. Shuhbooty moon child

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    This one amazed me. This one's good. But I agree with the CHOOSEN one. I like your others one better. Really sorry T.T
     
  8. micketymike Twilight Town Denizen

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    nice i enjoyed it
     
  9. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    *hugs* again lol don't appologise xDD


    This one I think is weaker because all of my other work is based on emotions and feelings ^^ This one doesn't really have that xD

    Thanks ^^​


    Thanks :)

     
  10. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Yes, but it's still good! *hugs back*
     
  11. Catch the Rain As the world falls down ♥

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    Thank you again :)

    ^^