Before you ask, this is a collabrative piece between myself and a friend. And we wrote it at midnight... It's meant to be a "Axel ft. So-And-So" thing so I'll mark it out. Her boyfriend, he says he likes it this way He likes, he likes the way I sway And I heard him say, yeah, I heard him say. She's the girl I ignored, she's the one The one on the dancefloor I think I'm falling in love again woah! I thought I'd never get my revenge on the guy On the guy who ruined my life. Don't you remember back in high school I was just the nervous, stupid, invisible girl in the classroom You and your friends used to make me break And you made my heart ache, ache, ache, Yeah, you broke me. And don't you remember the very first time I told you I liked you It gave me butterflies And you made my heart ache, ache, ache, Yeah, you broke me. Congratulations, I guess you get the gold medal For heart breaking and loaning yourself out But honey, don't you know I can be better than this? It's nothing personal, I'm just so over you If you thought that I was still healing, here's a reminder for you I couldn't care less. I never thought I'd get my revenge on the guy The guy who made me give up my friends. Don't you remember back in high school I was just the nervous, stupid, invisible girl in the classroom You and your friends used to make me break And you made my heart ache, ache, ache, Yeah, you broke me. And don't you remember the very first time I told you I liked you It gave me butterflies And you made my heart ache, ache, ache, Yeah, you broke me. Breaking, breaking apart. She got her way and made me pay for everything Wherever we went, I'd be the one taking her And she was expensive but I never seemed to mind I guess I know that I was blind. I never thought I'd get my revenge on the girl The girl who kissed me then said we were just friends! Don't you remember back in high school I was the guy who liked to play it cool You and your friends used to make me break And you made my heart ache, ache, ache Yeah, you broke me. And don't you remember the very first time I told you you were beautiful I swore you were And you made my heart ache, ache, ache, Yeah, you broke me. His girlfriend, she says she likes the way I play She thinks that I wrote this serenade about her. Her boyfriend, he says he likes the way I sway, I'm not dancing for him. Her boyfriend, he says he likes it this way He likes, he likes the way I sway And I heard him say, yeah, I heard him say. She's the girl I ignored, she's the one The one on the dancefloor
I really reaaaally like this one. It looks just like a song to me. The thing I really like are the repetion of words and the different point of views of the story. I think it's something many people can relate with one way or another. Very good job, be sure to keep me updated if you have written something new! Also tell your friend he/she did a good job n.n
I really like how you have both the persons point of view. I really think if you got the right technology, insturments, you could actually turn this into a song...:D
