Sitting alone in a peaceful meadow, Sweet aroma of violets, Bright green grass, The beauty's exhilarating. A feeling consumes me, Unexplainable, Painful, Nobody understands. I stand up and shout to the world, No one hears me. I continue to scream, Still, nobody understands. I try so hard, How do I express myself? Frustration building, Nothing works. Trapped behind iron bars, Unable to speak, Sitting in my peaceful meadow, Where written words are my only true voice. A school assignment... CnC please? :D and please don't just say "It was good" or "it sucked"... please give me constructive critiscism... I am trying to better myself as a writer, so I would like any critiscism, I don't care how harsh it is... Thanks. ^^
I really enjoyed the last line a lot. But the first verse/paragraph was a little odd because after talking about beauty, I felt as if you just jumped to hate. Overall, it was a really beautiful poem. I hope you get a good mark ^^.
