Poetry Contest February 2010

Guess I started this year off on the wrong foot when it comes to respecting deadlines. Nevertheless, the Poetry Contest for this month is up. It's a short month so make sure to drop your entry in on time (unlike well...me).

January's winner was Mvalentine. He wrote a delicate and somber poem which really struck me. It's a great example of knowing your way around the theme.

Congratulations!

This month's theme is Light & Darkness. Write about either or both as you please. Good luck to you all!

 

I have to say I didn't see that one coming thanks ^_^

My light, your smile, same difference.
In the mountain with the breeze.
In my dreams with your vivid eyes.
In the forest with the evergreen trees.
In the graveyard with the vampires that, like the sun, rise.

Wherever I go you happen to be there.
The light through the darkness; your smile the ultimate cure.
But when your pained and hurt, the light fades blacker than my hair.
But I'd much rather we keep the light pure.

You’re the stars in the otherwise empty skies.
You’re the rainbow in my veins.
You’re more hurt than you let on, you tell so many lies.
You’re stubborn as a mule, let me ease your pains.

Let me rid you of darkness and shine a light on your soul.
Let me share with you the happiness I hold.
Let me give you what I have, so your soul won't be black as coal.
Let me judge you as the highest bidder, to my lady, my light is sold.

 

Darkness

A life full of sadness and grief
My life something I want to lose so badly
this pain is overwhelming and lethal
will the light of god ever pull me through?

Seeing her cold body lying on the ground
mangled by his malicious mind
he brought me this pain
and he will pay it with his life

Light is said to be the ultimate power
but why is it the good die young?
Is it their innocence and unworthiness?
or is it their failure to control their emotions

I guess I died long ago
8 years to be exact
An attempt at a new life
failed when God brought strife

Darkness is the only way to survive
darkness is my friend
My emotions dry as the desert itself
that is the way I am alive

My heart faded into darkness
sinking into the depths of my mind
a memory once lost
until she came

I feared the light
So a blindfold is what I wore
blinding me from the dread of the world
that sight I could not stand

But when she came
my eyes couldn't lie
that blindfold seared by her light
is this love I feel?

I thought my emotions were dead
but light changes many aspects of your life
it strengthens you, helps you and makes life great
With her in my life I could look into the light

And not be afraid
I told her of my infatuation
and fate brought us together
I was so happy

but then it changed
as Fate had another plan in store for me
Light isn't only positive, but also negative
The light blinded me

The light kept me from seeing the pain
this world is dying
my love's life span cut short
then it all ended

As Death's hand reached for her soul
a new love ended by death
the darkness had crept back into my heart
devouring those happy memories

I stared at the pitch-black world around me
I knew my destiny now
to walk the path of darkness
forever blinded my grief and depression​

 

Congrats Mvalentine. Agree with Styx on all comments.
Why I keep attempting these contests is almost masochistic of me. I've entered over 10 times in the past with no winner or commendable mention. I could commend myself on not giving up, but scolded for 'not taking the hint' about my work.
Still, I guess that's the quality of work you get from writing a poem right there and then, on the spot. Sorry about the blabbing. Wanted to get that off my chest.

I'll put my poem up later on.

 

Hey don't feel that way...I've posted every month for nearly a year with no luck...it's not thr writer ut what he writes...So long as you keep at it you'll win, you just need to feel it.

 

For these kinds of things it's kind of hit-or-miss. The main point is interpreting the theme we are given in the most passionately driven and intricately versed way. The point here is trying to do something good, connecting with the theme to create something great. I encourage you to keep trying. Everyone's bound to win at some point.

Anyways, speaking of entering. Can I judge this one, Styx? I'd really love to do so. I know you do this normally, but could I please do it this once?

 

Hey, thanks people.
It's just I have all this hope for my work that builds up and it's dashed away. I kind of feel like i've failed. But you're right. It's about the passion and not giving up.
But please, no sympathy when judging. I want to be judged on the work, and nothing else.

Anyway, here it finally is:

Goodknight

He’ll mingle between the midday and midnight,
Betwixt and between, ever living twilight,
Twinkling on raindrops from the tip-top cloud,
It drops down, down, he’s lost in the crowd…

The man asks himself, what path to choose?
As a result, picks the cosy booze
That rests light, on the dark expression,
Of the hairy, dirty hobo, lacking a mission,
His life is in the gutter, street lights flicker,
And he takes another swig, the body sicker, sicker
How can a man fall so far?
With no house, nor wife, children or car…

Living on the cobbled streets, hiding in a alleyway,
Watching, then acting to keep criminals at bay
Sneaking silent round corners, eyes keeping a lookout,
For dealing, murders, gang hits about
He haunts, and preys on the terrors of the street,
Like the darkness, he’ll give them a trick’o’treat…

Headlights drive past, showing the cool expression
This is a man with cause, and strong ambition
He’ll always patrol our street, with gentle might
We say goodnight, to our dear dirty knight​

 

Alone Empty and Dark

Darkness
it surrounds everything
letting no light in

no one is here
no one ever is
I sit alone in the dark

now I understand
what it truly means to be alone
in this unforgiving dark

I'm left with nothing
knowing nothing
feeling nothing

I am alone
I am empty
I am one with the darkness​

this is horribly depressing D:

 

I'm going to lock this now.
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