Poem: Thoughts on a cold, winter night

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  1. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    Thoughts in a cold, winter night
    Wondering in the night,
    thinking through and through,
    Wondering if I might
    ever be with you.

    For when I see your beauty,
    When I see your eyes,
    it seems you are the pirate's booty,
    and i, the one that lies.

    The things I feel, these hands of yours,
    My heart begins to heal and jump,
    out of all the horrors,
    In my throat begins a lump.

    In the winter, when you're cold,
    My hands are here for you to hold,
    this heart of mine is to you, sold.
     
  2. Peyton Goddess Of Love ♥

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    Thias one was really pretty kingdomglory7.
    I liked it alot! It's really pretty n_n.
     
  3. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    Thankees >w<
    I wrote it for English class, and everyone said it was great!
     
  4. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    Cool poem! It's really well writen, I myself read it 3 times before posting this.
    Really cool poem! :)
     
  5. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    Thanks, man/Woman!!

    Man!
    I didn't know I'd get this good of feedback!
     
  6. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    *coughs man coughs*

    Wy are you surprised? when poems ans stories are well writen and have a good sense, they always get good feedback!
     
  7. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    I didn't think it was good.

    Oh sorry, man!
     
  8. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    I luvs it Kglory!!!
     
  9. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    THANKEEES, JAZZ~
    aGAIN, IT was for English
     
  10. Nanaki Broken in six places

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    Wow....I can relate to this. Nice poem!!
     
  11. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    So true!
    So can I!
    Emoness poem ;-;
     
  12. Joseki Traverse Town Homebody

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    Kind loving opinion: Its pretty and rhymes.

    Real Opinion : Its trite, cliche, and needs revision. I don't see anything in this poem I havn't read 100 times elsewhere. Try to separate yourself with better concrete images.
     
  13. Inasuma "pumpkin"

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    John, fkin' jerk. XD


    But yeah. I agree with your statement, brother.
     
  14. Kingdom Glory Banned

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    Did you like it or not?