Okay, this is my story. It focuses on the 'chasers' and the org's past lives. If anyone is interested in my other story, Kingdom Hearts III, pm me, and I'll put it up. People have lost interest in it, so I won't put it up any more. ~Chapter I- XIIth reflection~ "Arlene!!!" An angry man screamed. "Yeah, what?" She replied. "You killed her, didn't you? DIDN'T YOU?" He replied. "What?? Killed who?" She asked. He held out a small baby, nearly a year old. "No..Sandor!! What have you done??" She shouted. "I didn't do anything. You killed her!! Die!!" And Sandor lunged at her, ruthlessly. He had a taser, and he attacked. Arlene easily dodged it and kicked him, in the bum. That's when he got mad. He grabbed a knife and attacked her. He stabbed and stabbed, but kept missing. Then, she pulled the taser out of his hands.... "No! Sandor, you're my husband. You have to trust me. I didn't kill her." She told him, in a soft voice. But he was too angry to listen. Then, he stabbed her, in the arm. Blood came out, and fast. And Sandor laughed. Arlene held her wound. "YOU ARE GOING TO PAY FOR THAT!" She screamed, and got the taser out. She did a massive jump, it wasn't normal...Then, she plunged the taser straight into his heart. She saw the most horrible thing, a person getting electrocuted to death. "No..What have I done?" She shouted at herself. She had tears streaming from her eyes, remembering the good times she had with him. She couldn't take it. Arlene pulled the taser out of his chest, and stabbed herself. A massive shock shook the house. Then, a heart flew into the sky. A small black creature appeared, and ran off. But what they didn't know, the baby was not dead, but merely had a small scratch. Then the neighbour came in, for she heard a loud noise. A girl, about 11 years old, looked at them. Being a princess of heart, she felt sad. But, suddenly, a light exploded from her heart and the man was reborn. Alice looked at them, happily. Sandor stood up. "Oh, I'm alive!! Yes!! But.." He had a look at the crying baby."Oh, Kate, you will be in my heart." And he picked her up and kissed her. He was so glad that she was alive. "What have I done to Arlene? That's it. I swear I will find her one day." And although, Sora defeated her, She would still be around. She would be reborn once again, as Arlene. Xigbar looked around,through Hollow Bastion, trying to find a nobody as a recruit, for the organization. Then he saw a girl stand up. And he could feel that she was a nobody. "What is your name?" He asked, pleased with himself. "My name?? Arlene." She replied, a little dazed. Then, the word 'Arlene' popped up in front of her. Xigbar waved his hand, and the letters spun around her, in a fast motion. Then they re-arranged themselves as 'Larene' And BAM!! And X was inserted. So her name was: 'Larxene'. "Larxene is your new name." He said, and she nodded back. "Welcome to the organization. Come with me, and I can explain more." She nodded once more, and Xigbar opened a portal of Darkness. ~~~ Sorry if that was a bit sad. They will have a happy ending though. Next time: Organization XIII: The XI Birth. The first 12 chapters explain how the characters get born as nobodies, and the main story will be what happens to the org, after the events of Kh2.
Woa, ok hold on there for a sec.(First off, DOUBLE POST!xD Just kidding). I will say that you do seem to have potential, but you rush through things! You have to put your "Reader goggles" and see how we would read it. I will admit that your descriptions are really nice, but again, you rush through things a bit too much. Slow down a bit. Looking forward to reading your next chapters as I think this idea is a good one.(And since Chapter 2 is up I'll go read it xD)
