My first stab at poetry in ages. It's awful, but bare with me. Lingering in the Moonlight My longing draws my worn soul To the dimly illuminated balcony How I yearn for the days of ol' When our hands kept us in unity I gaze in awe at the orbiting sphere Whose faint glow catches my eye In hopes that my maiden will soon be here To fill the empty place at my side I ponder intently, if only for a second Thinking maybe she's watching as well Resisting the adamant urge to beckon To her love, and escape her hell For what is the burden of waiting But a hell that time is creating?
Not bad at all, if this is a stab at poetry after a long time, you've still the knack for it. I expect to see more, of course.
Obvious allusion is obvious. Ocean A bond of the heart, a bond of the soul That no cutlass so sharp could sever Forced into two, by Poseidon's domain The road which few vessels can weather The cruel divide between them The two who developed the connection Pushed the link to its limits And slayed their immaculate affection They stand at opposite poles Gazing longingly out to the water "It's better to have loved and lost" "Untrue," say the victims of the salughter They take a knee and look up Beckoning to whoever may reply For a reassuring word or two But alas, nothing but gray sky In an instant, everything seems null All the time, the love gone to waste And the awareness of the other's care Lost forever in the empty space They look out to the water again No response; their eyes never meeting Then their hearts' petrification Is cured by their souls' greeting The two reconnect, overjoyed More than willing to rebuild the frame Of their bond, so strong, so true Its successor, fondly named Friend.
Lyrics I wrote for a song my friend and I are writing. Not completely finished yet, kinda threw these together in about ten minutes. Hypnopaedic Romance These feelings I feel They must be real Allow me in you to impart These thoughts I intone They must be my own They all come right from the heart I've known for so long I cannot be wrong It's intervention from above And as my mind syncs It's not doublethink I prefer to call it love I have no basis For my heart's oasis My logic is completely sound I have no proof For why these hearts aloof Should be forever bound This hypnopaedic romance Shall not stop my heart's advance It just keeps my mind in place This hypnopaedic romance May be be harmful at a glance But it's really just a phase Others are so cold No hearts do they hold What awful things they contrive But you're mine alone As much as I know That two and two is five They conspire against What we've always sensed Was destined all the while Ignore what they say 'Til their words fade away Live forever in denial I have no basis For my heart's oasis My logic is completely sound I have no proof For why these hearts aloof Should be forever bound This hypnopaedic romance Shall not stop my heart's advance It just keeps my mind in place This hypnopaedic romance May be be harmful at a glance But it's really just a phase
Kinda a weird one I thought up. They're song lyrics, but I don't particularly like them; that being said, this is all I've written in months. Hmmm Spark A fire burns A thinker yearns For inspiration As he embarks On an excavation Into the dark Flash He's overcome A conundrum: Where to look first With this great sum Of mental bursts To disprove everyone Glow His strength endures Down to his core The flames rise Burn his pores The mighty pen cries As his proud heart soars Dim All light now dead He rubs his head He gets up Moves to bed Holds his flame's pup And he says, "Hmmm..."
Pretty good if it has been months since you wrote anything, I realy liked the way you didn't use cuplets all the time. A lot of people think that to have a good poem they need to put it in ryming cuplets, but you did a great job by mixing it up.
