Nova's poems :]

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Nova, Jun 4, 2010.

  1. Nova We left a scar size extra-large.

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    I was bored. It was 4 in the morning. I just got finished watching Whale Wars. This is my poem. (I never post poetry on here, so... yeah...) I write poems all the time, but this isn't my best work. I just got a kick out of it last night. I still get a kick out of it. Tell me what you think :D


    Environmentalists.

    You drag me down
    You make me feel like shit

    For what?
    Your cause?
    HA!
    NICE TRY!
     
  2. Juicy Chaser

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    This barely resembles poetry and therefore I believe I cannot give relative critique. I suppose it could be described as "short and to the point" or as a "snapshot into the mind", but I think the tasteless language used and only the weakest attempt at poetic device (in the form of the repetition of the "you" and the mild rhetorics) make this piece something I cannot appreciate as a poem.

    On the plus side, I would like to see more from you, since you clearly enjoy creating poems. Sorry if my comments seem harsh, I am always truthful but sometimes lack the tact needed to pass on my advice harmlessly, especially when tired.
     
  3. Nova We left a scar size extra-large.

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    Lol, I don't even think this is any good xD

    Thank you for your honesty.

    I do plan on posting my decent ones eventually.