NoN's book of poems

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Thanks Nights I'm glad you guys like it^^ lol here's my next one about a confusing problem I'm having to deal with =\ Enjoy my poem XD lol

My feet hurt.
It feels like there burnt.
I've walked for hours.
Trying to figure out why your so sour.

Why do you hurt me.
When you say you love me?
Why is he not here but you are.
Why has it gone this far.

I'm missing him but you keep bothering me.
With this talk of the love you see.
But I don't see,
and it's hard to believe.

I'm taken and your to late.
Why do you still ask for a date.
I'm his. But he's gone.
But I still wait till, I too am gone.

Waiting wile you confuse me,
with you saying you still love me.

 

The blade is at my neck.
'Should I do it?
What the heck.
My life is in the pits.
But yet I can't...
The blade is at my wrist.
In my head I chant.
All I need is a twist..
But I can't do it..
My heart hurts to much.
Even if my life is in the pit.
I can't take another punch
from your words, they hurt me.
But this is my way,
you see.
Of releasing the pain.
The band is at neck.
It's holding on tight.
Whatever I'm going to heck.
I give up this useless fight.
My head gets dizzy.
I smother myself in bed.
This is good bye till the end.
One last good night,
is what I send.
Till I follow that tunnel of light...

 

The only real constructive criticism that I have here is that stanzas are a very good thing. I see walls of text and readers don't like to see that for whatever reason. Other than that I'm liking some of the things that you're doing here a lot.

 

Ok I'll make sure to keep working on spacing it out more. Thanks TheMagicalMisterMistoffelees

 

i love your poems :)

 

EPIC!!! That all i can say EPIC!