Oh I like this one better. It has a background, and it completes it. The test flows perfectly, love it. <3333
There's a choppiness to the stock intertwined with the divided composition in light and dark to fit the concept. Concept in general's nice but the execution feels way too predictable. Font choices should also be experimented with here. Grab a font that isn't as sharp or traditional. Stock needs to be sharpened, including with the cities in the background, or find higher quality stocks for those in the background. Once the eyes get past what you're saying with this, they start to see how choppy and safe it feels. experiment.
