My sorta sad poems

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  1. AmericanSephiroth Traverse Town Homebody

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    these are poems i wrote while i was in class and ignoring the *****y teacher

    Bloody Tears
    While my eyes cry and they bleed
    I cant stop crying even if i get what i need
    I no longer see the way
    I cannot face another day
    My eyes show my sorrow
    too bad i wont be seen tomorrow

    this is the one on my signature this is mine and only mine DO NOT STEAL!!!!
    Spiralling Insanity
    How far must one go?
    To see this shining show
    a beacon of hope forever out of reach
    these fools believe this to be insanity
    why must all of this be constantly on me?

    I wrote these these are original so yea tell me what you think and ill post more soon
     
  2. Princess Luna Supreme Co-Ruler of Equestria

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    Very nicely written. I like it. And it's fine to have suicidal or deathly undertones, gives the poem it's 'feeling'.

    Do post more~
     
  3. AmericanSephiroth Traverse Town Homebody

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    My second set

    these i dont think are as good but these really have a dark comedy to them
    life clock
    Tick-tock goes the life clock
    the door protecting it wont open no mater how much you knock
    tick-tock its counting down
    tick-tock now you hit the ground

    Aggression
    Bloody face
    second place
    who has this you see
    its me
    why?
    its because i told them i wanna die
     
  4. Cleopatra King's Apprentice

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    I'd like to hear more from you. I like suicidal/death poems. These are very nicely written. Of course genious kicks in when you're not listening to the teacher ;D Awesome work.
     
  5. AmericanSephiroth Traverse Town Homebody

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    thank you. thank you. i wrote most of these while ignoring the spanish teacher because she cant speak spanish or english. ill try to post more soon but i kinda lost the paper i had them written on but ill find it and ill try to remember some more of them