Sitting in life's eternal mist, We look at each other, And see the good times. Making check marks on our list, The list of things to do, Before the summer's end. Whenever we are feeling down, look at me. And I will look at you. When we look at one another, I feel as if we were conected. You and I. Like sister and like brother. Like the soft colors Of a sunset on the waters, Like Two children who have just matured Into fragile lovers. So if you feel down deep, Look for me , And at me, And soon our hearts will link.
you can get a Moderator to move it or just leave it where it is and they'll either move it eventually or it'll just stay there and it won't really matter... >_> oh and that is a beautiful poem... :) I'd love to see more of your work... keep it up! :)
Thank u so much! I really liked writing it! Well actually it just came off the top of my head while i was on here yesterday...
Like the poem, feels like you based it off of Sora and Kairi on Destiny Island a little bit, which there is nothing wrong with. Only a few small grammatical errors, stanza 2 you have conected not connected. the last stanza you have a space between a comma that isn't needed. But a question: Why in stanza four is the word Two capitalized? It could be just a error, or were you trying to emphasize something? all in all, it's short, but it's a good poem, well done.
Thank u, i did realize it sounded alot like sora and kairi after i typed it...but i didnt base it off them
It was a very good poem, you might want to work on grammer though. Other then that you are a great poem writer!
