Traditional Art My little Rinoa sketch

I orginally wanted to do Rinoa's orginal outfit but tweaked it massively and turned her vest thingy into a cardigan flashing her midriff. The lips are not her but I can't draw those for toffee + the hands are awkward cos I forgot which hand she had on griever so I did her left. i also tried to draw the blaster edge in pinwheel model.

I really like how I did the hair especially the fringe.

CnC please and I know itmay be hard todo but it was the best I could do to take a photograph of it as our scanner is not working.

 

Criticism.

sorry if i sound harsh


The head is too big for the body in my opinion
the arms look flat and took outward unless she's trying to fly.
The face is a little slanted
the legs are spread too far apart

again, sorry if i still sound harsh

comments


i love the heart symbol below it though

 

It's not that harsh at all i'm already redrawing it on a larger sheet of blank paper oh and it's sort of an amano style with the eyes but keping some realism/anime to it it'smeant to look believable but stilll very fictional. I'll probably have it up by tomorrow

 

~one of her eyes looks larger then the other
~her arms are crooked and one arm is longer then the other
~one leg is alot thicker then the other
~one hand is longer then the other

I would probally give it a 2/10... sorry!

 

not meaning to sound rude but i agree with them, they covered all the critisism i saw so none of that,

coments
i can tell what the picture is so that is always good, and the idea for the picture is really good, also take into consideration all the critisim everyone posted when you are redrawing it, it might help! ^^

 

oh I've got my friend to draw the lips and I am working on the legs but hands are a demon for me so they have to look as best as i can do and leave it there.

 

They did say everything but I was like that too so the more you practice the better you will get.So don't give up:)

 

I hope I don't sound too harsh, but it needs so much fixing and is so off proportion wise it's really not worth giving too much Cnc. It's very flat, practice with shading too. Also watch how you draw the legs, don't turn them out too much. The shoulders slope too much, and the arms are too long. Watch how you draw the face as well. Use proportion referances and pictures of Riona to help you, and practice drawing her.
Keep working on it though!

 

About arms length:

Miss Earles (our schools best art teacherl): "Now most people draw arms too short than they actually should be because in real life if you have your arms down they reach your legs above the knee caps somewhere on the thighs roughly. Not above or around the stomach like most poeple do"

I couldn't have been that far off with length.

but yeah V2 is essentially done but I need to work on a shading effect (I refuse to shade the skin until I've finished all else) and possibly a background (though I may be a dirty cheat and trace one for it)

 

Please read the rules of this section before posting,it clearly says to CnC correctly,not spam the thread.


Now:
Well, the others pretty much said what I was going to say,work with the body structure,This thread will help you in your upcoming drawings. =)