My beauty, My pain </3

My beauty.
My pain.
Its gone now.
Gone forever, the feel
Of his arms round mine.
I cry out
Why?
Why did God do this to me?
Why take him away?
Does he know
How it hurts,
How it burns,
How it tears me inside
Like a knife through my heart
Now I cry.
His ghost haunts my dreams.
Its so real
It seems
If I wake I just know I will break and scream.

What was it?
Does God hate me?
What did I do?
Is it my soul
Is it dirty?
Or is it me?
Am I a blemish on the world
A scar on the beauty?

I pick up the knife,
No good stopping now
'Cause he ain't coming back
I need to feel better, somehow
I trace the skin of my flesh
It makes me tingle
Like his caress used to.
A thin line, a thin streak
Of crimson
It wells up, draws out
Just like the tears
That fall from my eyes
My eyes
My empty souls
My beauty.
My pain.


I've wanted to write something like this for a while now >.>
Not sure why O.O
As always, written on the spot.
Took me five minutes 8D
Any thoughts?

 

You really brought out those feelings inside the poem. It was very nicely written. Great job! :D

 

Poetry's not really my thing.

But I LOVED this.

You expressed everything so clearly, and the part where you said the knife tingled like his caress used to....That was an awesome line. And then the blood welled up like your tears.

I loved it. Can you teach me? <3

 

Aww thankyou hun <3
I try and write poetry different to how people usually think of it :3

I'd teach you except I've no idea what I'm doing half the time 8D I just...write xD You could give it a go sometime though <3

 

'Welcome. =)

I'm gonna have to, considering I have to do it for a Creative Writing class. x__x But I'll try my best. Hopefully it'll match up to something like this. xD

 

That was incredible. Very sad, but incredible all the same. </3

 

Wow, that was really sad. Very emotional. I am jealous of your poetic abilities.

 

You really shouldnt be xDD
Its just random stuff I scribble down 8D

 

If you're that good at writing random stuff, then you must be amazing at stuff you spend a lot of time on. So I will stay jealous *envies OWS*

 

xDDD
Aww thankyou :3
You're just as good a writer though.

 

Yeah, not really xD. I could never write anything like that in 5 minutes. Or 10 minutes. Or an hour. You get the idea xD

 

That was incredible. I loved it. It was so emotional...seriously, my eyes were tearing up.

You have a great talent for this. Good job. <3

 

That was sad </3
But nice.
Write more,I feel like I can relate to you(:​

 

Wow... That's touching. It makes me feel sad. And I know how you feel on your none-poem thing, I suddenly get the random things to write things like that. But the more I think about the poem, the more deep I can feel how the person feels (Thanks to all those classes in Literature) I can understand it better. You really have a gift. Maybe I should try more on the spot writing. Or post my on the spot vampire poem... Anyways, back on subject, FANTABULOUS job.

PS That's fantastic and fabulous together.