Misunderstood Feelings?

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  1. Shuhbooty moon child

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    I was moved by his charm
    I was touched by his looks
    I was speechless by his voice

    …what is this feeling?

    He would sing to me, to help me sleep at night
    He would call me name to make me smile
    He would do something reckless to make me laugh

    …I don’t understand this warm feeling?

    We hold hands as we walk
    We hugs me when nobody is watching

    I say his name and he smiles

    He takes hold of my face into his hands.

    My face grows warm, he moves closer

    His lips touches mine,

    …and I know this feeling is…love.

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    I made this, this morning. It was raining and I felt sad yet happy because it was quiet.

    So tell me what you think.
     
  2. ShadowofRiku Destiny Islands Resident

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    Its good and it was raining at my house too
     
  3. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Thanks, heh rains everywhere.
     
  4. Ratchet Bah weep graaagnah wheep ni ni bong!

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    I'd say that is beautifully written and full of feeling. I love the way there is a hidden rhythm to it. Well done.
     
  5. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Thank you, I'm not good and poems. And I thought that this one was good. I felt lonely when I did this, so yeah. Thank you again.
     
  6. xiegin Destiny Islands Resident

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    Wow thats good :D Nic job it has alot of emotion in it and its great..?? wat was u thinkin bout wen u wrote dis?
     
  7. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Love, heh why? Oh and Thank you, I'm glad you liked it.
     
  8. Desmonic Kingdom Keeper

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    It's a really nice poem!! Simple, yet straight to the point!! Nice job!!
     
  9. Shuhbooty moon child

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    Really? Thank you :D