Memory Break Chapter 10 (LAST CHAPTER!)

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On a scale of 1 to 10, what would you rate my story Memory Break?

  1. 11+ (I LOVED THIS STORY!!!)

    52.5%
  2. 10 (I REALLY liked it!)

    10.0%
  3. 9 (I liked it!)

    12.5%
  4. 8 (It was a cool story!)

    0 vote(s)
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  5. 7 (Good story)

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  6. 6 (Nice :D)

    7.5%
  7. 5 (Eh....so-so...)

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  8. 4 (Naw, not really)

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  9. 3 (Nooooo....)

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  10. 2 (I didn't really like it...)

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  11. 1 (I REALLY didn't liked this story)

    2.5%
  12. 0- (I HATED THIS STORY!!!!)

    15.0%
  1. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    CHAPTER 10 IS UP!!!! THIS IS THE LAST CHAPTER!!! I'd like to thank everyone who read my story. You guys pwn all! I hope you had a lot of fun reading it, because I had a lot of fun writing it! :D

    ~Chapter 10~

    All of the Nobodies in Organization XIII were in the living room, all excited about Zexion being able to talk and remember again.
    “How much do you remember now?†Lexaeus asked. Zexion looked up at him.
    “Well…I remember everything. My childhood, my days in the Organization—everything.â€
    “We’re just really glad you’re ok!†Demyx said, smiling. Zexion nodded, turning towards Larxene.
    “So, Larxene…you still think that I’m just a broken toy?†he asked. She looked away, crossing her arms.
    “Sorry about that…†she grumbled unhappily. Zexion’s smile faded.
    “But still…†he said, turning to everyone. “I don’t remember exactly how I lost my memory in the first place.†Xigbar sighed, and then looked at him.
    “It was my fault.†He sat down on the sofa, next to where Zexion was sitting. “You remember Luxord’s birthday that just passed, right?â€
    Zexion nodded.
    “Well…I got you to come with us to celebrate. When we were there, I got drunk and…†he trailed off, finding hard to finish.
    “I pushed you into the street, because you were trying to take us home.†Xigbar said. He looked down at the ground.
    “And then you got hit by a car.â€
    There was silence.

    Zexion nodded slowly as he took this in. Xigbar looked up at Zexion.

    “I’m sorry.â€

    Zexion then put a hand around Xigbar’s shoulder. He smiled.
    “Forget about it! What are friends for?†he said. Xigbar smiled.
    “I’m pretty sure it’s not to get their friends hit by a car.†He said. Zexion stood up.
    “Then I guess you haven’t had yourself as a friend†he said. Everyone laughed, including Xigbar.
    “Want to go for a REAL walk this time?†Xigbar asked, standing up. Zexion nodded.
    “Sure!†he said, as the two walked out of the door and began to walk around the Castle.
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    “Hey, Xigbar?†Zexion said, as they continued their walk. Xigbar looked over at him.
    “What?â€
    “It’s sort of funny…for the time that I couldn’t remember, I could only remember this story…†Xigbar cocked his head.
    “Really? About what?†Zexion smiled.
    “About this boy named Braig, and this boy named Ienzo.†Xigbar smiled.
    “Really?†he said, amused. “What did they do in this story?â€
    “Well…†Zexion said. “Braig had gone to Ienzo’s house to help him do something about this problem of his.â€
    “Oh?â€
    “And, Braig ended up standing up for Ienzo, who was getting abused by his family.â€
    “That’s terrible!â€
    “But I’m sure it had a nice ending.†Xigbar raised an eyebrow.
    “You mean you never got to finish the story?†Zexion shook his head.
    “I got my memory back.†Xigbar smiled.
    “Well, I think I could finish it.†Zexion looked at him, smiling.
    “Please do.†Xigbar thought for a moment, and then nodded.
    “Ienzo ended up finding his voice, and he finally stood up to his brother who was hurting him, and finally told someone at school about it.â€
    “And what happened then?â€
    “He got out of the family.†Xigbar said, smiling. “He got put into a nicer home, with a nicer family.†Zexion nodded.
    “Hey Xigbar, how do you know so much about this story, you know, with Braig and all?†he asked, smiling. Xigbar smiled back.
    “Well…I may have happened to know the main characters of the story…†he replied. With that, the two friends laughed, and continued their walk.

    “Xigbar, I’m sorry that I’m broken.â€

    “Zexion, I’m sorry that I let you become that way.â€

    â€broken together.â€

    “Yeah…â€

    “Broken best friends.â€

    “Forever.â€
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    “Hey Xigbar?â€

    “Yeah?â€

    “I remember something else from the night of the accident.â€

    “Oh really? What’s that?â€

    “I remember…someone yelling: “YAY GO RED CAR!!!â€

    “…â€

    “Who was that?â€

    “No one important…â€
     
  2. dancecat120 Gummi Ship Junkie

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    AWESOME!!!!

    great job!


    FIRST POST page pwn (lol)
     
  3. Viroxor Traverse Town Homebody

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    I feel so terrible about killing them now. But Xigbar was so malicious when I fought him! You cheated. But, if it's any consolation, they, Demyx, and Vexen were my favorites.
     
  4. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    thank you! *steals page pwn back*

    you mean in the game?

    yeah, i always feel terrible when i write stories...

    thank you for reading it! :D
     
  5. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    Loved it!! I always love your stories...and your ending was humourous, like always....can't wait til your next story...

    ..what's it gonna be about? You should do the new org member one...that seemed very interesting...

    Anyways...great job...again!!! I luv your stories!!!!!

    I am addicted to your fanfics!!!!!! Please, continue!!!!!
     
  6. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Actually, The 14th Key was the one I was going to pick! (I'm making an officail board later, along with a few possible hints about the LSSP (lond summer story project))

    :D

    Thank! :) I like making the ends funny. But they won't always be funny... (but 99.9% of them will! D:)
     
  7. Viroxor Traverse Town Homebody

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    I'm making a dramatic story at present, called "Number IX's Last Melody". Needless to say, it's about Demyx, and how he finds Tidus after the Destiny Islands' destruction. It could be interesting, and I'm making the second chapter soon. Anyway, I love your stories. But if it takes away from your inspiration on the BSP, I would take a break from the shorter ones.

    I'd be willing to sacrifice them for your BSP.
     
  8. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    ? - have you been looking at my fanfics? I could use some more thought on it from someone as talented as you...:D
     
  9. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    oh no! Don't do that!!!!

    I get my inspiration from my readers! When my readers like my stories, i'm inspired to write more of them :)

    Thats a really nice thing of you to do, but you really dont have to, and i dont want you to. :)

    You go ahead and write your story, and i'll surely read it! :D
     
  10. Pure Beats~ Chaser

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    OKay, who were the idiots who voted 0 on the poll? *takes out keyblade* Imma gonna get them!!!

    I voted 11+, cause it's just awesome!
     
  11. bluemoonlightgirl Merlin's Housekeeper

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    Yay! Happy ending! ^^ I liked it, you're a really good writer.
     
  12. Viroxor Traverse Town Homebody

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    I was actually saying "if it means making your BSP better, you should take a break from these shorter ones", but I'll continue my story if you really want to.
     
  13. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Well, whether you continue your story is up to you :)

    Nah....writing smaller stroies actually helps me, so that i dont get rusty on any possible skills i have in writing (which i doubt i have, lol :))

    Besides, writing smaller stories is fun, and gets me even more excited to work on the LSSP soon :)

    thats a really nice thing to say...:)

    sure! i'll read them! *goes to read*
     
  14. 2Foxxie4U ~The Forgotten Crusader...~

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    Entrance fee to get into a bar... 50 munny.

    4 cups of soda... 10 munny.

    3 cups of hard liquor... 30 munny.

    Hearing your best friend shout, “YAY GO RED CAR!!!”

    .....................................

    Priceless... XD
     
  15. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    XD *dies laughing* I have GOT to remember that one!

    I hope you enjoyed the story!
     
  16. Quiet Elegy This is the death of beauty.

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    how can anyone not like it?! i also voted 11+ ....i would have put 1000000000000000000000000/10 if i could :D
     
  17. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    Awww....thanks! :D

    Awwww...thank you! :D *feels happy*

    ooh! I gotta put up that thread! *runs off*

    Thank you! *is REALLY happy*
     
  18. ThunderOfLarxene Gummi Ship Junkie

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    shame it had to end, but that was a great happy end, really enjoyed that story, look forward to the next one:D
     
  19. twilit_shadow King's Apprentice

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    Amazing as always! And that last little bit about the "yay, go red car" ? Classic. :D
     
  20. Axel's#1fangirl Kingdom Keeper

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    :D Thanks!