Love

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  1. GhettoXemnas literally dead inside

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    I had never felt love and I had never felt hate
    I was an enigma locked up in a banana crate
    Then I found you
    And I found love
    My love soared
    High in the sky
    Love so high if I fell I would die
    Then love got shot
    Dead as a brain cell after smoking pot
    My heart turned cold
    Cold as ****
    Skatin on ice like a mighty duck
     
  2. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    I like how you put metaphors in there and one question is this part --->Love so high if I fell I would die is fell supposed to be feel?
     
  3. GhettoXemnas literally dead inside

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    fell is the past tense of fall.
    Example1: He falls down the stairs.
    Example2: He fell down the stairs.
     
  4. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    OOPs sorry i read that part diffrently :sweatdrop: i <3 it though
     
  5. Soushirei 運命の欠片

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    The second last line just killed me.
     
  6. Sumi suicidé

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    Awesom poem dude!
     
  7. JellyBeing ALL. THE. BUTTS.

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    Banana crate... lol.

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  8. Jiku Neon Kingdom Keeper

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    It's weird that you have such starkly different feelings included in this. The general tone is somber but bananas are funny and so were the last two lines.
     
  9. Hubba-Bubba-Bubbles Hollow Bastion Committee

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    it is a nice poem i really like it