Lonley

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  1. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    This is a poem I wrote when I was in study hall



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    I see this path infront of me
    This I can see
    No path for a person like you
    But what are you going to do

    Every place that is darkness has some light
    Alight that shines real bright
    Letting sorrow take over my life completley
    Hidding in the dark secretly

    Will this prove anything
    You can sit there and whisper and sing
    But what for
    You can do anything even soar

    I'm so lonley
    Come and show me
    Be what you can be
    then you'll see
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  2. Devil's Angel Gummi Ship Junkie

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    I love the rythmn and the flow throughtout the whole poem.And i like the ryhming to.The best part was the ending ^^
     
  3. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Thank you its my first rhyming poem so im proud of it
     
  4. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    Oh, this was beautiful...I loved it, great job! ^^​
     
  5. Sadden Blood Warrior Lost in the mind! Help help me god!!!!! Their afte

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    Thanks ^ ^