Leave me behind

Discussion in 'Archives' started by Emzy ♥, Aug 5, 2009.

  1. Emzy ♥ Gummi Ship Junkie

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    Don't ask where this came from. I know that at least someone will seek some message behind it.
    I was just writing and this popped out of my head when I began to think over things.

    It's rubbish in my eyes, I just hope you all like it <3

    Do not be afraid to run,
    I don’t mind being left behind.
    It’s like a repetitive voice,
    Echoing in my mind,
    Like I’m a love struck teen,
    Being kissed for the first time.

    Leave me behind...
    Leave me behind...


    Like a smack in the face,
    But only on the lips,
    Not a face approaching mine,
    But only that of a fist.

    Leave me behind...
    Leave me behind...


    You will eventually leave,
    And go your own way,
    When you will realise,
    This is the game I like to play.

    When suicide is so yesterday.​
     
  2. Daenerys Targaryen ok

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    I really like this Emzy.
    It is impressive,makes you think a bit.
    My favorite was:
    "Like a smack in the face,
    But only on the lips,
    Not a face approaching mine,
    But only that of a fist."

    Very smooth to say outloud and it flows.
    Nice job,love.
    :3
     
  3. Chevalier Crystal Princess

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    This poem is pretty simple, and yet it's very good. I find that last part extremely twisted. I like the flow and enjoy it quite a bit.

    Nice going there.