Kingdom hearts:the New keyblade masters

(( note: roxas and namine never went back into sora and kairi and axel and larxene never died lol just a idea XD oh and riku ended up with selphie))
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PROLOUGE


Four men sat in a room, their faces stunned as their wives had just left them with their children, one man,with spikey brown hair looked down at the baby in his arms,how was he meant to look after her? he had never looked after a child in his life...well now it was time he did...this was his daughter....he had to look after her....or her mother would be very angry with him and he didnt want that...he looked at the others,they were watching him,as if watching what to do...he sighed

"so uh...now what?"he said

"dunno..."said one with blonde spikey hair,he glanced at his daughter "well...she seems to be sleeping..."

"yeah same with this one..."said one with flaming red hair,looking down at his son

"aw man....why do i get the baby that never sleeps?!"said the last with silver hair

"well...maybe we should just put them to bed?"said the first getting up and walking to a golen cot he laid the baby girl down,he pulled something from under her and she imeditly woke up and began crying

"Uh-oh!"he said "uh...uh...i dont know what to do! kairi normaly sees to her!" he said

"sora! calm her down already!" roxas said now trying to calm his daughter down,who was also crying now

"Uh....right..."sora said picking up the baby again and rocking her,she soon stopped her crying and sora sat back down with a sighe,he closed his eyes,still holding the baby

"if they're like this now....what will they be like when they're teenagers?"riku said

"i dont like to think about that....not yet..."axel said sighing
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chapter one
start of a long boring summer!​

a girl,with long brown hair and sea blue eyes,sat up in her bed,rubbing her eyes,she looked around the room,then she got out of bed and pulled her clothes on,a pink top with no sleeves and a black hood and a pair of sky blue jean mini shorts,she slipped on her shoes and ran down stairs,bumping into her father

"where are you going?"sora asked his daughter

"out dad...you do know its the first day of summer."she said

"Oh,who are you going with?"he asked

"oh you know, hiro,yumi,and kite..."she said

"ok akiko..have fun..."he said

"dont worry...i will"she said grinning then she ran off again, running down the road,she stopped at a door and knocked a man with silver answer

"hey Mr Riku, is kite there?"she asked

"Yeah akiko he's up stairs,go up and get him if you want." riku said letting her in

"thanks"she said heading up the stairs,she walked down the hall and stopped at a teenaged boy's door and found him bending over a drawer muttering

"wheres that sock?"

"looking for this?"akiko asked holding up a sock as she had found it outside in the halll

"yeah thanks,akiko" he said showing no suprise that she was there,in fact she came from him so often,he knew what time she would be there at,he stood up,his spikey brown hair looked even more spikier,he had a red sleevless top on and three-quater length trousers,that were deep blue,

"ready?"he asked

"me? i was ready way before you!" she said laughing and giving him a small push,kite and akiko had been best friends since they were born really....but akiko liked him a little more than a friend...what she didnt know was that he felt the same,they left his house after talking with his parents,they made their way to the other island,once there they found their other two friends,hiro,who was wearing a blue top with no sleeves,and black three-quater length trousers,his blonde hair filled with sand after he had fallen,trying to get to them,and yumi,who was wearing a green top with a white hood and white shorts,her long blonde hair blowing in the wind,once they had spoken for awhile they sat on the peir

"welll....this will be one long...boring summer!" hiro said grinning at the others

"you got that rigth!" kite said

"yeah"yumi said nodding

akiko nodded and watched the waves

 

You are a very good writer. Keep going. Don't stop.

 

Interesting idea of having the next generation taking the helm of a story. My only comments thus far are that you need punctation and capitalization.

 

And hopefully, not another full reality and no Keyblade story. I saw one, and that was NOT my type of coffee, cause it describes the bad side of Sora.... BRR! A DRINKING AND SMOKING SORA! BRR!

 

This is totally awsome SORA!:3 great job! I agree with the darkness grows within- don't stop! keep going! your doing great^^

 

thanks for the Cnc guys...heres the next chapter:D
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chapter two-hearing the converation

it was almost dark by the time they finaly went home,or rather sat in Akiko's house, Akiko was sitting on her bed,Kite sitting at the door,Yumi sitting on a cobord and hiro sitting on a chair,they were talking about what they should do during the summer...Akiko then said,she'd go down and get the something to drink,as she reached the kitchen,she herd voices,

"Sora...we really should tell Akiko about it...she will get it one day...."her mother,kairi,was saying

"no,not yet....we cant rush things..."Sora said

"but,wouldnt they be even more annoyed that we didnt telll them?" Kairi said sighing

"i get what your saying kairi,axel...i also think we should tell hiro....you know how hot-headed he can get once he's angry..."Larxene said

"and like Sora said...now's not the time..."Axel said

"but when will it be the time to tell them? when they finaly get the keyblade and go into battle?!"Larxene said

"keyblade?...battle?...whats this all mean? are they hiding something from us?"Akiko thought,she went closer to hear better

"oh come on! they just started their summer vacation for god's sake!"Roxas said"and you want to tell them about the keyblades!"

"yeah,Roxas has a point there..."Riku said "let them have fun juring their summer....they're only fifteen..."

"then what? well tell them as soon as they go back to school?"Namine said

"No..."Roxas said

"then when? or do we not tell them at all?!"selphie said

"dont you want to tell them?"Kairi said

"Ofcourse we do!"Sora said

"then tell them tonight!" Namine said

"no Namine! we cant,not yet!"Roxas said

"So you would rather they go into battle unprepared?!"Larxene said

"we would rather they dont go at all!"Axel said

"Well they have to! none of us want them to go!"selphie said

"FINE! ALRIGHT ALREADY! WE'LL BLOODY TELL THEM!"riku said

 

the only problem I saw

 

what do you mean?

 

OMG! I loved that chapter! So much conflict. I wonder how the four friends are going to react once they've found out...Squee! Your such a great writer SORA!

 

if you look in the quote, look at the word in blue.

 

yeah? whats wrong with it?

 

Is it suppose to be during not juring?

 

fixed it lol

 

great story by the way. Keep writinging.

 

great story! keep writing =]

 

Short chapters. Lengthen them out a bit and you could get more people reading. =]

 

I love the ending! "FINE! ALL RIGHT!! WE'LL BLOODY TELL THEM!!" XDDDDDDD

 

heres the next chapter...
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chapter three-the door and the key

Akiko lay in her bed,facing the wall,she was pretending to be asleep,she could hear her parents talking

"Oh sora...you said you would tell her!"Kairi was saying

"i know...i know...maybe.if they found out on their own....."he said

"it would be better? do you think so?"

"me and riku found out on our own...."

"but your parents did have them did they?"

"look....i know you want me to tell her....but i think it would be better if she found out on her own...."Sora said,after that she couldnt hear anything,and she finaly drifted off to sleep....

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The next day she was walking along the beach with her friends,they walked the little path to the secret place,one after the other they went in,they looked at all drawings.....they liked to sit in here...mainly because of the pictures...some where their parents...some where theirs....but Akiko liked them all....she smiled as she looked around,then sitting down,she sighed,putting her hands behind her head and closing her eyes,until...

"Hey....where'd that door come from?!"Yumi said, door?,Akiko's eyes snapped open,she saw what yumi was talking about....a brown wooden door.....in the cave! what was going on?!,she got up,so had the others....they made their way to the door,Hiro went to it and examined it

"hey....theres no handle...."he said"weird....."

"wounder where it goes.....if it even opens..."Kite said

"wanna find out?"Hiro said

"I dunno.....it could be bad ...."Kite said,he had a funny feeling about this...

"dont be such a baby kite!"Yumi said"go on hiro! open it!",hiro reached for the door,Akiko was looking at the ground....remeber what she had heard last night before her mother had said that they should be told...

"what about the door in the cave?"

"if its opend again....the world will coverd in darkness....again...."

"and thats why you dont want to tell them? in case one opens it? come on sora! they're not that stupid!"

"No....its not that....i just...dont want them to go away..."

"sora........" Akiko looked up just as hiro's hand touched the door

"HIRO! DONT OPEN IT!"she said in panic

"why?"he asked as his hand dropped....too late....after his touch....the door opend and darkness poured out...covering the four

"WHA-WHAT IS THIS STUFF?!"he said trying to ge it off,they heard lightning outside,the winds picked up,it was raining too,cracks appered in the ground...Yumi screamed...it was covering their heads until...there was a blinding flash off light and the four stood,all clutching some sort of key,they stared at them,then a almighty gust of wind,combinded with the darkness,pushed them forward into the door,then...it closed....

 

It's really good.

 

Oh
My Gawd
MOOOOOOORE!!!