Kingdom Hearts II: Chain of Memories

Okay Guys, I got bored in math class so I wrote this story. This story takes place between one week after KH 2 and one week before the guys receive the letter from King Mickey. I use the knowledge from my personal theory of Kingdom Hearts III in the story. Tell me if it's good or if it sucks...please.:D




Riku woke up with a startle. He got up and looked outside his window. It was a beautifal day in Destiny Island, but no matter how beautifal the day looked, memories of Xehanort haunts Riku everyday. He changed and went out to the water to catch fish. It was Spring Vacation at his school so he had nothing else to do. He was alone, Sora and Kairi were still asleep, it was creepy. He caught three fish and ate them up for breakfast, he was a heavy eater. It was almost 9:00 A.M., an hour had passed, and Sora and Kairi were still asleep.
"Where are they,"Riku said. Then a fear rose up in his mind. He flashed out his keyblade and yelled, "Xemnas, where are you!? Come out coward!" He was breathing very hard and looking around desperatley. He felt pathetic. He knew him a Sora just defeated Xemnas not too long ago, but he couldn't help but think he had something to do with it. He ran, cluching his keyblade and yelling, "Sora, Kairi!"
He arrived in Sora's room, but it was empty! Kairi's room, empty as well! He ran to the waterfall, the dock, the paupu tree, and finally the secret place where Sora and Kairi usually make out. When he got there, he saw a man in a hooded coat.
"Xemnas!" Riku yelled as he swung his Keyblade at him. It did nothing, it just went right through him.
"Keyblade..." he whispered as he faded into a portal of darkness. Riku wanted to jump in, but something in his heart told him not to.
"Damn It," Riku whispered. He ran out and jumped into his raft. He plowed over to the town. He ran through the field of crops and looked at the road. He founed Sora, drenched with water, staring at the ground.
"Sora!" Riku called out happily.
"Where were you Sora?" Riku asked quietly.
"She's gone," Sora said emoitonless.


Well there you have it. Tell me what you think...please.:D

 

Interesting. Nicely written.
Improve your grammar a bit, but otherwise, it's okay.
Great story.
Try getting a little more different paragraphs too.

 

I liked it! That's proably the only story someone has written about Riku aother than my own.

 

thanks

thanks:) I'll try to watch my grammar:D

Thanks!:D I was actually only going to write about Riku in the begining and Sora for the rest. But you and your story has inspired me to right a HUGE section of the story with Riku. Thanks again!:D :) :p

 

Er, it needs to work on your spelling too. Try on your Word or Apple it find the errors before you put it up or look for a dictionary. But regardless of that, I like it.

 

Really? Is my spelling that bad? Oh, whatever, thanks!:)