ok, i wrote who-knows-how-long-ago so dont critisize too badly, i was young. ___________________________________________________________________ I have been having these weird thoughts lately... like, is any of this real or not?I opened my eyes. "Where am I?" I wondered. It was a gastly place... I opened my mouth, but nothing came out. Water! I was under water! I could breathe fine. This can't be real... can it? The previous minute's memories came to me. This is what they were: I was on the beach. Riku, my friend, was standing in the ocean. He turned around and held out his hand. I began to run towards him. The ocean started to swell up. Riku stood stalk still.Before I could get there, the wave came crashing down. Riku stood on the ocean floor, hand still out-streached. I tried to get to him, but the water sweapt me away. I finally got out of the ocean. Kiari, another friend, was waiting there. She was smiling widely. I smiled back. Then she stared past me. I looked. Something was falling. It was... it was me... IT WAS ME!!!!! I rose in the air. I started falling, too. I hit the water with a big splash. Now am where I am now. This had to be real. "It can't!" a voice in the back of my head reasured. "It can." I said back. "It can and it is." I sank to the bottom of the ocean. This part was unusally deep. My feet touched solid ground. The bottom? No... a floor... but how? "So much to do... so little time..." said a voice from behind me. I spun around. No one there. "Who.. What?" I said. "Walk forward."said the voice. I did. When I did, 3 pillars appeared. A sword on one. A sheild on another. A staff on the last one. "What in the world...?" I managed to say. "Pick one. Only one. Then pick one to destroy." the voice said. Of course, I picked the sword, and the staff to destroy. "Uh... " I said. "What is this for?" No answer. Then the floor broke. I mean, litrally broke into small peices. I fell. Then I landed on another floor. Then, a little black thing came up to me. Then, it slashed me! "Aghh!" I screamed stumbling back. "Strike it with your sword." said the voice. "uh...alright...whatever you say." I told him. I did what the voice told me to and it disappeared like a ghost!
wow...good work...I don't think I noticed any spelling errors. You did forget a few spaces between puncuation marks and the following word but that's it. *thumbs up* You do know that picking the sword and losing the staff(I think) gives you the worst starting stats in the game right? Oh well, it was a good read.
