Kingdom Hearts: Another Story

very nice =D
wheres sora tho?

 

You're welcome, girl friend. :glomp:

It's nice to see you up and writing again. If you need anything else just PM me. :p

Now about the chapter. Plot's shaping up nicely. Two teams so far, Takari/Riku & Ami/Kairi. Sora's probably still sleeping unaware of all of this...Yeah, right. Of course he's not.

Other than a few minor formatting issues, there's nothing that needs to be changed. Work on some more when you've got time, 'kay? :D

 

^^
Will do that.
xD .. I might need your super-awesome-skills-of-writing again!

Heheheh. I just saw that writing in white.. XD
Obvious he's not.
Two teams. WOOHOO! :D

Formatting isn't my thing... ^^"
And i still gotta work on more.. >.<

 

Hey look! A filler! =D

Okay... Not exactly...
xD
I'm just trying to prevent the thread from getting locked due to lack-of-posts! ^^"

Such a small update....
=O

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“S-Sora?!” Ami and Kairi gasped, recognizing the silhouette of the person’s body.

“The one the only!” Sora turned to the two girls and grinned.

“But… How did you know we were here?” Kairi asked in a puzzled tone.

Sora stretched. “I heard you two talking when you were walking to the boats,” he yawned, then continued, “You two are so loud!”

Ami smiled but said in a serious tone, “Is that supposed to be an insult? We were doing fine until you showed up!”

“Last time I checked…. It looked like you two were gonna die!”

Kairi sighed after minutes of the two arguing back and forth. “Stop fighting! We have bigger problems!” she pointed out.

“Oh yeah. Where’s Takari and Riku?” Sora asked.

“That’s what we’re trying to find out!” Ami answered. “I saw the storm and I knew something bad probably happened…”

Sora thought for a moment and smiled. “Hmm… Let’s check the “Not-So-Secret-Anymore” secret place!” he decided finally. "Since... We that is where their supposed to be anyway."

Ami and Kairi nodded. “Alright” they agreed.

The three ran to one of the sets of stairs that led from the beach to the regular ground, and sprinted up towards the entrance to the secret place.

“Uh-oh…” Ami said with her eyes widening as she pointed to the entrance. Kairi and Sora stopped and looked as Ami pointed.
“Cave in…” Sora mumbled.

“We have to help them though!” Kairi practically yelled. She waited for Ami to agree.

Ami was already running towards the rocks as Kairi finished talking. “Takari! Riku!” she yelled through the rocks and fell to her knees. “Can you guys hear me!?” she started digging through. She turned back to Sora and Kairi. “You two can start helping anytime now!” she said in a frustrated tone.

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Takari lifted her head as she thought she heard a voice coming from outside. But… No one’s here, right? Ami, Kairi, and Sora are back on the main island… Aren’t they?

She looked over at Riku, who seemed to be lost in thought. “Did you hear that?” she asked shyly.

“Hear what?” Riku asked, puzzled.

Takari stayed silent for a moment, hoping the sound would come back. “N-nothing…” she answered sadly. She shook her head, figuring she was just going crazy. I guess I’m just hearing things…But I thought for sure that I heard someone...

Riku let out a sigh after a long time to silence between him and Takari. “You know… This is getting pretty boring” he said calmly.

Takari looked up, surprised, and nodded. “Yeah. We probably should—“ she cut her sentence off. “There it is again!” she stood up, “Please tell me you heard that!”

Riku listened intently for a moment. “Voices?” he waited.

They both heard the muffled sound of three voices, each seeming louder than the other.

Takari widened her eyes. “It sounds like Ami, Kairi, and Sora!” She ran towards the tunnel where the rocks had caved in. “Ami?! Sora?! Kairi?!” she yelled in disbelief.

She waited for an answer, but there was none except for what seemed to be the repeated yelling of the three outside.

Takari felt a sickening feeling grow in her stomach, and her body began to shake. “I-it’s no use… We can hear them, b-but they can’t hear us…” she stammered.

Riku walked up behind Takari and put his hand on her shoulder. “It’ll be okay. Don’t worry.” He smiled.

Takari nodded sadly. “Yeah… I guess you’re right…”

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Ugh. I can't believe that's all i came up with...

Sorreh folks, the creativity train is all outta juice. D:
I have no clue what to do for the next part... Even though i have most the story mapped out... xD
help me DF!

I promise i'll do better next time! =D

 

You could write it this way:

1)Super slashes from Sora cuts away rocks (If you play the game, you'll know that this is no joke...)
2)Trinity Limit... provided you can come up with something... cause Donald and Goofy ain't here.
3)Ami's specialty to blast things open? Dunno, you decide...
4)Anything else. In fact, go slam yourself on the head to get ideas. Now THIS, is a joke.

 

You might want to work on your punctuation a bit. It kinda got to me for a moment.

Xuan actually has a couple of good ideas. For me personally, I'd...

...Hmm...maybe I should PM you instead...:huh:

But, yeah, the story's shaping up. You might want to have added slightly more, though...

Not bad, Kasa-chan. ;)

 

Omg! I love this story! and D.F's right ya know, just a little punctiation errors! But either way, I love this story!

 

Heheheh.
I'm probably hated for no updates. >_>

Well. Here's the thing:
I haven't been able to write anything to the story since i last updated. ^^"
I have state testing this month, which is just "ERGH!"
I'll try to come up with a decent update this summer, so keep on the lookout! :D

MEANWHILE:
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