Kingdom Hearts and the half nobody

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  1. Luna561 Traverse Town Homebody

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    This is a story about Sora and Riku still in the realm of darkness.

    Sora and Riku were walking around to find a way to return to destiny island.''Say Riku, what you say if you want to fight to get stronger?'' Sora said bored out of his mind. Riku said nothing at first then said''Nah, I'm good for now. Why are you bored all ready?'' Riku said. Sora nods. Riku laughs. Sora sat down and fell asleep. Riku sat next to him and look at the night sky. What is going to happend to us if we stay here too long? Riku thought. Sora was dreaming about Kairi. He missed her soo bad that he can't sleep.
     
  2. Nymph of Destiny Chaser

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    This story's pretty good...some suggestions/help/advice on how to write it perhaps:

    Sora and Riku were walking around, trying to think of a way to return to Destiny Island.
    ''Say Riku, what do you say we fight to get stronger?'' Sora suggested, bored out of his mind.
    Riku was silent at first, but then said, ''Nah, I'm good for now. Why are you bored already?''
    Sora nodded, as Riku laughed. Later, Sora sat down and fell asleep. Sitting next to him, Riku looked up at the night sky. What is going to happen to us if we stay here too long? Riku thought, frowning.
    In the meantime, Sora was dreaming about Kairi. He missed her soooo bad that he couldn't sleep.

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    Otherwise, the story's great, and it starts off nicely. I can't wait to see more!
     
  3. Luna561 Traverse Town Homebody

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    Sorry i'm bad at this some times.
     
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    It's alll good......I can't even right a decent story so...yeah......
     
  5. Luna561 Traverse Town Homebody

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    ''Sora, are you a wake?'' Riku asked. Sora was quiet. ''Sora!'' Riku yelled. ''What?'' Sora yelled back. ''What do you want to do now?'' Riku asked. Sora was unsure. Riku sighed and laided down. He was worried if they were going to die or not. Sora was going to find something to eat. ''Where are you going?'' Riku asked. ''To find something to eat.'' Sora answered.