Traditional Art KH-The End of Everything *a KH comic*

My first shot at comic-making...here goes...

pg 0
Chapter 1
pg 1
pg 2
pg 3
pg 4
pg 5
pg 6
pg 7
pg 8
pg 9
pg 10
pg 11
pg 12
pg 13
pg 14
pg 15
pg 16
pg 17
pg 18
pg 19
pg 20

Update
I kinda rushed through the first chapter so it's probably not the best. And my scanner messed up some pages more than others so I had to change the toning on some pages, causing some panels to look darker than others. I'm working on the second chapter right now and I'll probably spend a lot more time than the first one. =/

Srry for so many links. This is the only method I can come up with. T_T

 

OMFG COMIC!!! Weeeeee!!

I read through it all, noticed some minor grammar errors. If you plan on polishing this up with inked lineart you'll want to keep that in mind before writing - adding ruler lines for the text helps keeping them straight as well, so concider using that too. :>

LOVE the poses you have chosen to draw for the panels, most of the time I feel like I'm being dragged into the story itself. Especially this one panel when Kairi's walking up the stairs in her house I liked a lot!

Be careful not to draw too many panels after each other that looks almost the same.. Kinda makes the page more boring than it really is you know? An example of that would be when Sora's playing the shooter game just after he got headshot'd ( LOL ) - btw was it someone other than Riku he was playing against? I didn't really catch that?

Also... I took it that this was being read from the left to right. With manga you never really know anymore, heh. Remember to always let the parts you're meant to look at come in the right order, if the placement of panels/text bubbles are too varied it makes it confusing to read.

I request that you add harder lineart over chapter one so that it's nice and visible. :> Don't have to do that if you don't want to, but now you know my opinion. And continue drawing light on chapter 2. Rawr.

 

I LOVE it. There's a few gramatical errors, but otherwise I like it a lot. I like the expressions you draw, and I <3 it <3 it <3 it.​

 

I really like it dude. Its interesting too (better than the kh manga imo) I was sort of confused about the whole namine-roxas thing but I assume its them appearing like they did at the kh2 ending. I wanna see what happens to Kairi next! The artwork is pretty good. I can definately see you put time into it at least. The way the plot is going kind of reminds me of bleach, actually...sort of. Putting in real-world things like "CS" and "final exams" was really nice, and what I like the most is that you still stuck to kh elements like "munny" and stuff. Keep up the good work is all I have to say now.

 

I'm srry bout the grammar. I wrote more than half the comic at 2-3 in the morning. =/ And my writing gets kinda slipslod during the summer so...lol, I'll work on those some more.

And yes, I do know the inking isn't the best. I'm working to improve that on chap. 2

As for everything confusing, I will explain it further in the story.

 

I will be patient~

Once again I lurv this it is so addicting​